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Martie
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0 posted 2003-10-30 02:09 PM



I heard aluminum crash
against the spill of morning
and awake the desperate air
singing like lightning
it curled against time
and startled the trees

I was rain then
desperate for fire
filling the clouds until they were dark
riding the wind from the sea
listening to the spirit swift and keening
opening me

Awake now within the light
a crow is calling to another
and the trees have talking leaves
cool their fingers now release
the hold and twirl
the smoke is gone within this air

Against the spill of morning
the clouds are clouds in truth darkening
they move across the blue of sky
and in the gathering of time coming
there is a promise and a thank you

© Copyright 2003 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-10-30 02:18 PM


Saw a sky high map last night
that showed the smoke fanning out toward the sea...
and quietly, I walked the hills
once more.

Well done, Martie.  With tenderness and grace,
as always.

littlewing
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2 posted 2003-10-30 03:28 PM


My God Martie  . . .

it curled against time
and startled the trees

I SAW this . . .

I was rain then
desperate for fire

what a beautiful birth
*smile*
xxoo

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3 posted 2003-10-30 04:03 PM


I enjoy so much looking through your eyes Martie and tagging a step or two behind

Excellent as always and yes; graceful too.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


Kensho_Cinder*
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4 posted 2003-10-30 04:51 PM


This is absolutely stunning.
The imagery does indeed make one feel as if they are literally "seeing" the words.

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2003-10-30 05:14 PM


Martie
A wonderful read.

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6 posted 2003-10-30 06:11 PM


Sometimes those dark clouds are a very good thing. Today especially, when everything is burning, they give hope and even some relief just by being there.

You have such a way with words that the poem disappears, leaving only the images in my mind. Magic, that is...and it's a pleasure to be under your spell for a bit.

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Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 2003-10-30 06:39 PM


Oh, Martie, your descritions are so realistic and heart wrenching. I don't know how you put these thoughts into words.
But I truly felt them
LOve you
Liz

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8 posted 2003-10-31 11:09 AM


It's a pleasure to look through your eyes -- in or out, I suspect.



~~J

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9 posted 2003-10-31 11:15 AM


You are able create, or re-create, a mome in time so realistically, that I am transported to it and feel as though I am actually experiencing it. You truly are a poetess, Dear Martie ~ with a gift divine.

Be safe! Be well!

Linda

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10 posted 2003-10-31 12:32 PM


Martiesis~
How you amaze me ...~

To bring the storm to life right before my eyes ... mesmerizing~
Happy Halloweening gal~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
     noles1@totcon.com     

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11 posted 2003-10-31 12:39 PM


Marvelously worded!
You continue to please the ear.

Janet Marie
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12 posted 2003-10-31 12:52 PM


it curled against time
and startled the trees

I was rain then
desperate for fire

=============================


Let it Rain... oh let it Rain...

Your personifications define poetry Martie-girl.

Words break into splinters on the pages I write
If I lost you I don't know what I'd do ...
Burn forever where the flame turns blue

David Gray

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13 posted 2003-10-31 01:00 PM


always enjoy reading you...you always make my mouth fall open in awe
Gentle Spirit
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14 posted 2003-10-31 01:02 PM


always such a joy to read you Martie, and so often I find I end up saying the very same thing...always...
IWIHWT!!  Hugs gal.

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15 posted 2003-11-01 05:32 AM


Absolutely stunning images... this is magnificent!
Goodknight
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16 posted 2003-11-03 11:10 AM


Martie - the images you paint and the feelings you evoke are always something - this is great poetry - Paul
Margherita
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17 posted 2003-11-03 11:56 AM


Dear Martie you hear Nature's music so well ...
Deeply enjoyable read.
Love, Margherita

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18 posted 2003-11-03 12:05 PM


I love being able to see through your visions.It's wodnerful.
Crystal

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