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joan
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Estonia

0 posted 2003-10-30 09:53 AM


Silence broken by tears,
the emptiness between us,
the knowing of ending what fears,
counting minutes that pass.

You can see the pain,
you can see the tears in her eyes,
no happy endings, it's not a tale...
nobody ever sings lullabies.

We built our own empire,
but what if the queen has no heart,
and she hurts like a vampire
when she leaves by Mozart.

[This message has been edited by joan (10-30-2003 12:39 PM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-10-30 10:15 AM


Welcome to Passions, Joan.  I have a feeling you're going to enjoy your time here - it's quite addicting, habit-forming, but can also be mind-enhancing and pleasure-giving.  Let us know if you ever have any questions.

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

Pilgrimage
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2 posted 2003-10-30 11:00 AM


Joan, this one is powerful. I especially like the last two lines-well done.  I think the spelling on 'emptyness' should be 'emptiness'.  

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Susan Caldwell
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3 posted 2003-10-30 01:00 PM


Welcome Joan!  Wonderful first post!  Please check your email for a special greeting from all of us here!

Susan

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

passing shadows
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4 posted 2003-10-30 01:03 PM


very nice first post....I personally love the sad ones and this hit the mark

Welcome to Passions

Krawdad
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5 posted 2003-10-30 01:04 PM


Welcome to the place!
I think you will like it here.

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6 posted 2003-10-31 11:16 PM




(big hugggsssssssss) Oh Joan, this is a wonderful and powerful debut, sweet friend, you know, one of my new favorite shows is named after you, "Joan Of Arcadia", I recommend it highly to everyone, this is a great poem, yay! Welcome to Passions, sweet Joan, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your beautiful poetry, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2003-10-31 11:56 PM


Joan~
Welcome to this circle of poets and friends~
Enjoyed the read ... I know you'll find so much to enjoy here~

Looking forward to reading more of your poetic thoughts~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
     noles1@totcon.com     

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