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rambling_words
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London, Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2003-10-29 06:43 PM


A city of colours is falling on its knees
praying to the God of autumn
questions gathering like leaves from the emptying trees
barren hearts hung out on a line of guitar strings
broken chords playing melancholy tunes for the soul
memories of love filter through the cloud cover
rays of light rare to the eyes of November
digital photography developing by darkness
pictures of the summer stored in the empty space of nothingness
my mind fills with images of your face
sweet vanilla skin touching the circling sky of blue
fragile hands painting on a solid canvas of forever
I can not see beyond you
but I can see beyond the sky
space is a distance that I can measure
your distance I can not measure
mathematics can not define you
I count the days back and I find they are actually years
wasted by collecting poems and recycling words
letters not sent and books not written
it is gone away
the special feeling inside of me
the thing that makes us all unique
the way you made me feel was unique
there are no pictures for this feeling
there are no words for this feeling
it is there
and then it is gone.


© Copyright 2003 John Raeside - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2003-10-29 06:55 PM


rw...A wonderful poem, full of imagery that captures the emotion...bitter sweet, yet beautiful.  Welcome to Passions!
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2 posted 2003-10-29 07:07 PM



Let me ditto Martie, in all ways.  
Welcome to Passions!  

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

Susan Caldwell
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3 posted 2003-10-29 08:03 PM


Welcome to Passions!  What a wonderful first post!

Please check your email for a special greeting from us all!

Susan

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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4 posted 2003-10-29 08:07 PM


A city of colours is falling on its knees
praying to the God of autumn
questions gathering like leaves from the emptying trees
barren hearts hung out on a line of guitar strings
broken chords playing melancholy tunes for the soul
memories of love filter through the cloud cover
rays of light rare to the eyes of November
digital photography developing by darkness
pictures of the summer stored in the empty space of nothingness
my mind fills with images of your face
sweet vanilla skin touching the circling sky of blue
fragile hands painting on a solid canvas of forever
I can not see beyond you
but I can see beyond the sky
space is a distance that I can measure
your distance I can not measure
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This is such a creative and cool piece.
You've blended images, colors, and superb use of personification of the season and nature to illustrate your vision and express the emotions. Very well done poet sir...
Welcome to poetry land...so nice to have you here with us. I look forward to reading more of your impressive writing.

You're the color of the sky reflected in each store-front window pane ...
You're the whispering and the sighing of my tires in the rain.

J. Browne

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5 posted 2003-10-29 11:40 PM






(big hugggssssssss) Such gorgeous imagery fills this flowery debut, sweet friend, we can always see beyond the sky is the sky is never the limit and through ones eyes a heaven can be found! This is beautiful, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet John, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your fabulous poetry, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet John, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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6 posted 2003-10-29 11:59 PM


sweet vanilla skin touching the circling sky of blue
fragile hands painting on a solid canvas of forever
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YES! I loved this imagery!
Welcome to Passions, Rambling! I look forward to more from you.

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