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Finding Rhythm

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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 10-28-2003 12:28 AM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Susan Caldwell


Catch my breath
on the wind
as it passes by
whispering your name

Cup me in your comfort
seal me in your security
touch me to taboo

Feel my heart beat
as it races
to the rhythm
of your touch

Peel me to purity
free my fears
melt my mediocrity

See the soul
of who I become
with the words
that caress your lips

take my hand and walk with me
towards tomorrow

[This message has been edited by Susan Caldwell (10-28-2003 12:41 AM).]

© Copyright 2003 Susan Caldwell - All Rights Reserved
KoKo
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1 posted 10-28-2003 12:35 AM       View Profile for KoKo   Email KoKo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for KoKo

Loved this
Janet Marie
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2 posted 10-28-2003 12:45 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

WOOOOO HOOOOOO ....
A hottie poem full of alliterations...
the moth is giddy!!!!  

Susan this poem makes me holler--IWIHWT!!!!!!!


Catch my breath
on the wind
as it passes by
whispering your name


oh yeah... love that verse...
high inspire and your pens on fire.
very cool write.

You're the color of the sky reflected in each store-front window pane ...
You're the whispering and the sighing of my tires in the rain.

J. Browne

Duncan
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3 posted 10-28-2003 01:11 AM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

I was here and I'll be back.     (Watching the parade)
Duncan
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Thought I might've dreamed this.  But it's still here!  Mornin' Myrtle...
Seymour Tabin
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Susan,
Well done enjoyed.
Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 10-28-2003 08:46 AM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

Thank you Koko!

JM~LOL yes the alliterations were intentional..*sigh*

Duncan~It's still here baby..now what say you?

Sy~Good Morning! And thank you so very much!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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Susan, this is a beautiful write!

littlewing
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Oh God Susan yes yes yes

take my hand and walk with me
towards tomorrow

what a beautiful sight indeed
xxoo
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this is absolutely beautiful!!
Castlehigh
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Susan,

This is beautiful. In particular I love the words,

"Catch my breath
on the wind
as it passes by
whispering your name"

The image is pure.

With this image you can walk with comfort and security into your tomorrows.

Gives a good feeling, Susan.
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And therein the rhythm of a delicate tango...

well done, Susan.
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Susan, I'd say this poem proves that you have found your rhythm! ~ and this write caught my breath! I loved it! Very well done!!!

The following lines really stick in my mind:

"Peel me to purity
free my fears
melt my mediocrity"

~ and ~

"take my hand and walk with me
towards tomorrow"

To love eternal,

Linda

Susan Caldwell
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Kacy~Thank you so much!

Sue~Thanks! It would be indeed…

Sea~Thank you!

Castlehigh~Thank you, you and the mothy one picked out my favorite lines

Kari~ “the rhythm of a delicate tango”  
perfect! Yes! Thank you.

Linda~Thank you! "Love eternal"

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

Duncan
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14 posted 10-28-2003 06:42 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

Well Myrtle, if I'm willing to follow you into a tornado, I guess tomorrow shouldn't scare me too much.  Ok, since you asked so nicely, let's take a walk.  I am bringing breadcrumbs though.     
I don't think I've mentioned that this is really one hell of a good poem.  And I'd say that even if I wasn't biased toward it's writer.     
Magnus
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Wow Susan....ya did it didn't ya?

Very nicely done....and when JM hollers like
she did,  it certainly is...
Duncan
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16 posted 10-29-2003 08:47 AM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

I was just wondering how come I find Susan's alliterations so lovely, well placed and inspirational and JM's drive me kittylittercrazy!?!?!??!  
(Better not be seeing any dancing tigers in the thread, Jams!)  
Janet Marie
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You must be crazy from the heat to dare a moth about her tigerboyyee.....

cant believe you even went there.....

I got your litterations porch puppy.... heh

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Janet Marie
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Catch my breath
on the wind
as it passes by
whispering your name

this has a big sigh attached to it Susan, what graceful writing in you words!!
vandana
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liked this
gemjop
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Peel me to purity
free my fears
melt my mediocrity

Susan! I have missed your words.

walking towards tomorrow with you.
p.s love the new pic! very beautiful indeed, and lovely to see you smiling!

love ya gal.

~I wanna live, I wanna give, I've been a miner for a heart of gold~  Neil Young

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Bravo Susan...I love this. It is more light and airy then I have read in a while. Of course I have been so busy lately too I don't get to pop over here as often as I want. Damn fine read this morning though. Well done!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Duncan
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You're right Jams, musta been the fever...
He really would make such a nice shooting gallery target, ya know???
 
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