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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2003-10-27 02:19 PM



Your picture hangs behind my eyes
on an inside edge of my brain
so my mind can find it
anytime I need to know
that you are real;
it's funny to me,
since our reality
is that thousands of miles,
and our mutual sense
of self responsibility,
keeps us apart,
I know
the beating of your heart
matches mine,
I feel you in my sleep,
smell your scent in empty rooms,
hear your laughter in my dreams,
yet,
I know that I'm so little
when I'm sad,
lonely,
frightened of mortality,
or just need a re-set switch,
it is still that picture
I see,
intentionally.  

I was proud before you found me,
needed no one,
nothing stood between me
and the edges of oblivion,
and I was not afraid.  

I guess
I was bigger then;
I had spent my time in Hell
and I knew as well as any
all the sins writ in my book,
the karmic ledger
that I carry over from life to life.

Challenged,
I'd say,
"Yeah?
So what?
You want a piece of me?
Come see what you can get
today!"  
and most would run away,
a few that didn't even lived
to say they wished they had.  

I was glad
I'd lived a life
less common in my youth,
and had the means to choose forgetfulness
whenever I was stressed;
those karmic bricks,
the memories,
the screaming faces in my sleep,
all the rest,
the souvenirs
the remnants,
were simply counter weights
to keep me walking straight
to finish
everything I'd chosen in this life,
and I could wait however long,
or little it would take,
to die
this time,
so they could be released
from constant consciousness;
then unexpectedly,
like karma's private joke
you floated through my armored walls,
two eyes
that slipped into my soul,
turned all that stone to smoke,
made me realize what
until that moment
I had never really known,
I'd been alone.

©2003 by icebox

© Copyright 2003 icebox - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
1 posted 2003-10-27 03:01 PM


icey?

you know we have traveled far different paths and many, at that but this here . . .
My God . . . I felt as if you were writing of my experience as well . . .

No, I THOUGHT I KNEW what ALONE was
I had NO clue
*smile*

I was glad
I'd lived a life
less common in my youth,
and had the means to choose forgetfulness

yes, me too
and to you sir, I tip my hat
for wearing your soul on your face
This is absolutely brilliant
xxoo

serenity blaze
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Posts 27738

2 posted 2003-10-27 03:16 PM


stunned--I am simply stunned and amazed.

Just when I go thinking I am unique I read myself again in another's words.

Mind if I keep this'n?

"Challenged,
I'd say,
"Yeah?
So what?
You want a piece of me?
Come see what you can get
today!"  
and most would run away,
a few that didn't even lived
to say they wished they had."

sighs and smiles. It's true. Somebody went and melted a perfectly good witch.   



Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
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3 posted 2003-10-27 03:17 PM




What Sue said...

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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4 posted 2003-10-27 03:18 PM


Sir, two things.

Quit melting Serenity.

But keep writing just like this.

Martie
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5 posted 2003-10-27 07:36 PM


icebox....heart-touching!
James_A_Fraser
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since 2003-09-03
Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines
6 posted 2003-10-27 09:04 PM


We have much in common, it seems -- including a strong sense of responsibility. I've a feeling we're not alone.

Well written, well conceived.



~~J

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
7 posted 2003-10-27 09:15 PM


there are things suffered I have never found words for, until i started reading yours ..thank you

..and then one day you find..ten years have got behind you..no one told you when to run..you missed the starting gun..

wranx
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since 2002-06-07
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Moved from a shack to a barn
8 posted 2003-10-27 10:35 PM


"I was proud before you found me,
needed no one,
nothing stood between me
and the edges of oblivion,
and I was not afraid."

And then?

This biography is yours, I know...But much of what you write visits places that I've not yet the chitlin's rediscover.  

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
9 posted 2003-10-27 10:47 PM


I've think you've written, to fit your own mold, all the lives of those who've lived them and foretold the lives of many to come...
and excellent, excellent write, my friend.

jwesley

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10 posted 2003-10-31 02:28 PM


I have felt this....exactly this. I appreciate the way you express it -- wish I had said it so well when I've tried.

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Honeybunch
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11 posted 2003-10-31 05:23 PM


Icebox, dear Icebox .... I'm stunned into silence.
vandana
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12 posted 2003-10-31 06:28 PM


enjoyed
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