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Sadelite
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0 posted 2003-10-26 09:32 PM




Outstretched green leaf delights to nourish
    the evergrowing tree
Until sap steps downward to compromise
    loved maternal duty.
The waning sun reflects her tears splattered on  
    dying palette leaf.


Like dammed pen ink sap,she can not nourish
    those she loved so well.
Until springing time comes again
    and then only time will tell
Whether regrowth will emerge from within cocoons  
   tight wooden shell.


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Magnus
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1 posted 2003-10-26 09:45 PM


Enjoyed this...it depicts the parts of the
tree's maternal cycle, if you will.  And
you have impeccably pointed out so well each
part,  causing me to think...nice write.

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2 posted 2003-10-27 12:32 PM


Enjoyed this POV.
Spring always brings renewal.

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displaced
3 posted 2003-10-27 04:09 AM


wow...had to read this twice...good write
Sadelite
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4 posted 2003-10-27 07:34 AM


Magnus,
   Hm.  Impeccably?   Why, thank you!   That made my day!
                            Sadelite  

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5 posted 2003-10-27 07:39 AM


Passing Shadow,
   Thanks for stopping my way and reading it twice.   There was a lot of thought that went into it, but i didn't know if it came out.  Shadow, again, pass by any time.
                              Sadelite

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6 posted 2003-10-27 07:41 AM


Midnitesun,
   Thanks for the read and the positive comments.  Happy writing to you.
                           Sadelite

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