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"The Shed Of Spells"
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"The Shed Of Spells" |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Shed the cloak you have worn, waken now, and arise. Sleep no more, let the darkness itself be my eyes. For too long 'neath the spell of the light have you lay, as the runes did portend, has returned witching day. Shed the bonds which have held, loathsome tools of restraint, placed on you, eons old, a race memory ,faint, still remains, feel it weakening, loosing it's grasp, 'til are shed from its' hold and returned from the past. By what name will you go when at last have been freed and what manner of form will you take that your needs be fufilled on this night,when the last rays of sun, fade to gray, then alight, witching day has begun. To inherit your place midst these costumes, bizarre, shed your spell, your disguise, that I know who you are. [This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (10-26-2003 10:25 AM).] |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
"Am I retreading old tires? One of the most original messages in the little critique box I've ever read.  No, you are not retreading old tires. You, dear sir, are creating wonderful poetry. The flow is perfect. The read divine. I enjoyed this very much. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
WhiteRose, And you, Madame, are much too kind. I thank you whole-heartedly for your comments, and, wish you the best for Halloween. Doc |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Sounds like an inner search for who this character really is. Shedding the skin they are in, and finding another thing to be to resign themself to what they are among all the masks he/she wears. One has to wonder when thinking about this...why would someone have to hide if the ones around them accepted them to begin with? I don't think anything hides unless it has been given a reason to. Love, Terri~  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetDoc~ 'By what name will you go when at last have been freed and what manner of form will you take that your needs be fufilled ' A small excerpt that means soooooo much to me this day~ Have a Happy Halloweenie yourself dear poet~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Terri, Interesting thoughts. Thank you. To be honest, I was more involved in the rhyme and meter and wrote this rather ambiguous piece to be left open to the readers' interpretation. Doc Dear Marge, Thank you, sweets for the sweet there pumpkin. Doc |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
To inherit your place midst these costumes, bizarre, shed your spell, your disguise, that I know who you are. Hm. I've been thinking along the same path lately. Nice write. Sadelite |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Sadelite, Thanks. The interpretation of words leads more often to confusion than enlightenment. Damn, did I just say that? Oh well, I guess that's what allows politicians to prosper. Damn, did I just say that? I guess what I mean is, I try to write along a theme, carry it throughout the piece, and try to hammer it home at the end while maintaining form. Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't, in my mind, sometimes it fails miserably. I try not to post those. Glad you liked. Doc |
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