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Shoal Waters |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Shoal waters sleeping beneath indigo seas, awaiting rend of wooden hulls. Gentle swells caressing, lightly teasing the bow as trade winds fill billowing sails guided by ancient stars upon a night of sailor’s dreams. Soft creak of wooden planks, swing of the clapper teasing a forged bell... Eight bells....all is well. A single lantern, red light taunting foamy crests.....red, right, returning, a mariners whispered words. Temptation to swing the helm, shift the jib to starboard. Thwarted by tendrils of a lighthouse beacon washing over the shallow shoal.. Shoal waters beyond the naked eye of straining faces, lead line falling silently into waters, searching depths till the mark is shouted loudly to the helm. Steady she goes, as a long wooden hull glides smoothly onto the crest and softly slides down a swell. Onward passage, past whispering shoals, into fathoms safe, as sailors dream a hearty taste of fine ale and soft curves... As dolphins push the bow and wings of flying fish guide salty winds on canvas sails.... Red sky at night....sailor’s delight [This message has been edited by Magnus (10-21-2003 10:34 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sir, drop some of "the" etc., and this will become everlasting. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry...It felt like you were talking about a woman. The sailor will always be in you, my friend...he is quite a guy! |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
 Hello Barry Such a wonderful picture was seen before my eyes as I read your magical words. I could almost smell the sea air and feel the salt water on my face. Absolutely brilliant!! Take care........Sue I am in motion |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Red sky at night... There's your epic title my dear poet. Wonderful write. TD |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
This is most beautiful, and so peaceful....hugsssss Lauren~ Will the wind ever remember the names |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Barry, this is beautiful, sweet friend, you cast all your wonderful visions out to sea and conjure such majestic sights, yay! (big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
"Hey Sailor" wanna get lucky? |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
beautiful Barry! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
LOL@Michele! Barry~Two things gave away that this was indeed a long time ago...The wooden hull (I think the minesweeps were the last to sport wood, as far as ships are concerned) and the ale! I loved it because being out to sea is such an experience and you bring it to life! Susan "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ This is beautiful~ What a soft render of a time recalled~ I love the mighty sea ... the call of the wayfaring sailor in me I guess~ You are such a pleasurable read, sir~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, A well painted canvas. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Absolutely beautiful....I loved all the imagery....I could see and feel the sea and the ship.....excellent poetry!  ~*Krista Lee Knutson*~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a wonderful tale |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Barry....even a land locked lubber like me can appreciate this masterpiece! Thanks, Larry |
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