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Without your Words

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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 10-21-2003 05:32 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Susan Caldwell

I heard you say your words are gone
I weep with sorrow for my part
I am so insignificant
Compared to who you are
And how you write

Without those words
You so selflessly give
I find it hard to breath
For I seek them as a reminder

Of how I long to be
what I ache to feel
how I should view the world
and what I need to keep moving

I stand muted
Stunned into sorrowful wails
Of hunger
For words I took for granted  
And what is now gone from my eyes

That which is mine no more
To devour at my leisure
I am stunted by your silence


"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

[This message has been edited by Susan Caldwell (10-21-2003 05:34 PM).]

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nakdthoughts
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1 posted 10-21-2003 05:42 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

silence does that...

I know that for a fact


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2 posted 10-21-2003 05:48 PM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

Oh susan...silence always makes for great writes...this made me feel like crying hun, I understand, just know that and

One for the library.

~I wanna live, I wanna give, I've been a miner for a heart of gold~  Neil Young

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3 posted 10-21-2003 06:11 PM       View Profile for Lotus Breeze   Email Lotus Breeze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lotus Breeze

Times can be where words are better than silence, I know how it is to want to hear words and not hear.  Poem good to make think
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4 posted 10-21-2003 06:15 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

Excellent Susan,  metaphors abound,  and
you got the punch in all the right places.

Darn that old word of Love.....such
bittersweet sorrow at times..
BluesSerenade
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5 posted 10-21-2003 06:16 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

Awww Susan, you're breaking my heart!

Hugs good poetess!!!
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6 posted 10-21-2003 06:18 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Reminds me of some of my favourite writers
who used to post here at PiP.
They say their muse has left them..
they have no more words.
And I feel so lost when they go.
~Heart Hugs~

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

Susan Caldwell
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7 posted 10-21-2003 10:41 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

Thank you all so, so much for the caring responses!

But I have to tell you, this isn't about a lost love.  Actually Nancy pretty much got it right...and I will leave it at that...

You guys are great!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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(big hugggsssssssss) I hate to see anyone run out of words, as I believe everyone has a voice and to not sing is like not breathing! (sad sigh) There is a wide language with so much beauty abound, God Bless You, you speak with pure heart, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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9 posted 10-21-2003 11:37 PM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

Susan.. I love your poetry.. Keep it coming.
Susan Caldwell
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10 posted 10-22-2003 09:16 AM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

Thank you Noah and Meg!!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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11 posted 10-22-2003 12:04 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I'm sending this one to me own moody muse so
maybe she will take pity on me
very cool write Susan..love the poetic spin you put on the idea of writers block.

"I've still got sand in my shoes
and I can't shake the thought of you ...
I wanna see you again."

Dido

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awesome write!

love the new pic too!
Susan Caldwell
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13 posted 10-22-2003 01:11 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

JM~ Thank you!  It's even worse when it is someone else's muse and you have come to depend on their writings...

Dixie~ Thank you! I tried a pic that doesn't look sad!!

Susan

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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14 posted 10-22-2003 01:33 PM       View Profile for Paul Wilson   Email Paul Wilson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Wilson

Susan...Enjoyed. Your words say what so many of us feel, I for one get to where I can't wait to read the next poem from certain people, because their words are like a magnet drawing me in and touching my heart. Sometimes it's like they wrote it just for us.

Thanks so much for sharing...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

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15 posted 10-22-2003 01:38 PM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

I stand muted
Stunned into sorrowful wails
Of hunger
For words I took for granted  
And what is now gone from my eyes

That which is mine no more
To devour at my leisure
I am stunted by your silence

poignant writing hon, very well done.  I felt this one to many times myself.  HUGS


Duncan
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16 posted 10-22-2003 07:12 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

Hmmmm...well, this can't be about me, 'cause as you know, I never shut up!!!!  
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susan you are so beautiful...h
Susan Caldwell
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18 posted 10-23-2003 09:07 AM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

Paul~ Yes, exactly!  Thank you for reading.

Donna~ Thank you so very much!

Duncan~ Of course not darlinnnnk..but now that I think about it...I still haven't seen any postings from you??  

Helen~Thank you that was so sweet!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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Okay Susan...I love this. I'll even tell you why. Many times I draw my own inspiration from other peoples works. Sometimes I find my muse in music, sometimes from a poem I have read, or even a conversation in passing. This is just great. I really like how you captured upon the paper canvas the experience. The way there is an emptiness without the other persons words. Well done girl! LOVED IT!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Susan Caldwell
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20 posted 10-24-2003 12:12 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

Evoc~

Exactly.  This particular person is someone I have come to trust and admire.  Their words, in poetic form and otherwise make me look at myself and I thought they would just always be there...

I still hold out hope!!!

Thank you for reading and responding!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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Susan Caldwell
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22 posted 10-24-2003 12:51 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

Back at you Dan.

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

Darren
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23 posted 10-24-2003 03:17 PM       View Profile for Darren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Darren

Susan that was fantastic, I know exactly of what you speak. As i wait with baited breath for their next words.

Thanks for sharing, and the understanding, misery enjoys company.
Susan Caldwell
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24 posted 10-27-2003 04:22 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

Thank you Darren!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

 
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