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Without your Words |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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I heard you say your words are gone I weep with sorrow for my part I am so insignificant Compared to who you are And how you write Without those words You so selflessly give I find it hard to breath For I seek them as a reminder Of how I long to be what I ache to feel how I should view the world and what I need to keep moving I stand muted Stunned into sorrowful wails Of hunger For words I took for granted And what is now gone from my eyes That which is mine no more To devour at my leisure I am stunted by your silence "if you won't let me fall for you then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you" ~Dido~ [This message has been edited by Susan Caldwell (10-21-2003 05:34 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
silence does that... I know that for a fact  M |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Oh susan...silence always makes for great writes...this made me feel like crying hun, I understand, just know that and  One for the library. ~I wanna live, I wanna give, I've been a miner for a heart of gold~ Neil Young |
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Lotus Breeze Member
since 2003-09-06
Posts 112 |
Times can be where words are better than silence, I know how it is to want to hear words and not hear. Poem good to make think |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Excellent Susan, metaphors abound, and you got the punch in all the right places. Darn that old word of Love.....such bittersweet sorrow at times.. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Awww Susan, you're breaking my heart! Hugs good poetess!!! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Reminds me of some of my favourite writers who used to post here at PiP. They say their muse has left them.. they have no more words. And I feel so lost when they go. ~Heart Hugs~ ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you all so, so much for the caring responses! But I have to tell you, this isn't about a lost love. Actually Nancy pretty much got it right...and I will leave it at that... You guys are great!  "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssssss) I hate to see anyone run out of words, as I believe everyone has a voice and to not sing is like not breathing! (sad sigh) There is a wide language with so much beauty abound, God Bless You, you speak with pure heart, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Susan.. I love your poetry.. Keep it coming. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you Noah and Meg!! "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'm sending this one to me own moody muse so maybe she will take pity on me  very cool write Susan..love the poetic spin you put on the idea of writers block.  "I've still got sand in my shoes |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome write! love the new pic too! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
JM~ Thank you! It's even worse when it is someone else's muse and you have come to depend on their writings... Dixie~ Thank you! I tried a pic that doesn't look sad!! Susan "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Susan...Enjoyed. Your words say what so many of us feel, I for one get to where I can't wait to read the next poem from certain people, because their words are like a magnet drawing me in and touching my heart. Sometimes it's like they wrote it just for us. Thanks so much for sharing...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I stand muted Stunned into sorrowful wails Of hunger For words I took for granted And what is now gone from my eyes That which is mine no more To devour at my leisure I am stunted by your silence poignant writing hon, very well done. I felt this one to many times myself. HUGS |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Hmmmm...well, this can't be about me, 'cause as you know, I never shut up!!!!  |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
susan you are so beautiful...h |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Paul~ Yes, exactly! Thank you for reading. Donna~ Thank you so very much! Duncan~ Of course not darlinnnnk..but now that I think about it...I still haven't seen any postings from you?? Helen~Thank you that was so sweet! "if you won't let me fall for you |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Okay Susan...I love this. I'll even tell you why. Many times I draw my own inspiration from other peoples works. Sometimes I find my muse in music, sometimes from a poem I have read, or even a conversation in passing. This is just great. I really like how you captured upon the paper canvas the experience. The way there is an emptiness without the other persons words. Well done girl! LOVED IT! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Evoc~ Exactly. This particular person is someone I have come to trust and admire. Their words, in poetic form and otherwise make me look at myself and I thought they would just always be there... I still hold out hope!!! Thank you for reading and responding! "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Back at you Dan. "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Darren Junior Member
since 2003-09-30
Posts 30 |
Susan that was fantastic, I know exactly of what you speak. As i wait with baited breath for their next words. Thanks for sharing, and the understanding, misery enjoys company. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you Darren! "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
So brilliant |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gawd susan, this is beautiful! |
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