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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Oil Painting It was hot that autumn. Her clothing stuck to her body, and the air felt solid. She thought I was eating bites of it, until there wasn’t enough to breathe; certainly not enough for the pains that tore into her and made her scream, then plant me into the antiseptic white dirt of the maternity room. She, cinched at the waist, a flowered dress, and a bow in hair, I’ve seen the photo. Even a nurse all properly white and holding me. I’ll be back in a week after resting, dearest baby, she swooned up the stairs, the heat tracking her dry fingers across her face, where she drew a line with oils. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I sit here, reading your offerings line after line, then read again, sometimes getting the same picture, sometimes seeing it waver beneath my gaze, and I think you are then related to Dr. Mesmer... Sigh. Teach me. Then tell me how you're coming along!  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
the heat tracking her dry fingers across her face, where she drew a line with oils. I definately can see this vision Martie, you write it so well. hugs hon [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (10-20-2003 07:12 PM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Beautiful write Martie, I am trying to come up with who the characters are, not sure....but that is your mystique that intrigues and captivates....isn't it? |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Wonderful as always my friend.  Crystal |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing...the way you put happenings into words.. One day...one day...perhaps you will teach me how? Hugs~ ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
The character is my mother, and I am the baby. Thank you! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Duhhhhhh, why didn't I figure that out? Sheesh! Thanx Party Martie..... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
You capture the drama, the reality of the scene, so simply. Your imagery always seems perfect to catch the moment and show the deeper levels at the same time. Marvelous writing here, Martie! I'm going to study this one, so that maybe I can come to understand more about how you do it. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Mother giving birth, and then the picture afterward of her holding you. Baby pictures of me and my sons came to mind. Brought back lots of memories. Thanks for taking me back. Love, Terri~  |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Martie! VERY nice. I can smell the antiseptic white dust...(sniff) Wow. Larry |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Cant find the words, stunning and wonderful write. Jason |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
You my dear poetess are an oil painting of finest colors. Beautifully written, thank you for sharing |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie I've never seen such vivid painting with a palette knife of words.  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
yes yes I saw that right away at first I thought you meant you but no . . . what a beautiful entrance sincerely and this: She thought I was eating bites of it, until there wasn’t enough to breathe; lunged out from the page itself grabbing hold of my throat My God you are brilliant xxoo |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Incredible write, Martie... you painted this beginning vividly. *S* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sis~ A painting of poignant recall~ I love you~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Martie, this is just beautiful, sweet friend, you are a wonderful poetess and also a master artist! (kiss on cheek) Yay, this is one for the gallery, hehehe, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
I take pride in my graphic imagery, but I don't hold a candle to you. Good stuff! |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
descriptive, good imagery...i can see it now:Þ i think that it's brainless to assume that making changes to your window's view will gain a new perspective. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
The images you portray are always exceptional Martie Dear. And, I do beleive I have seen that photo too   youMaree p.s keeping this fate is not just |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - the images you evoke and the feelings....well this is just sooooo good - loved it - Paul |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Just can't read this without saying at least something! So there, I said it! (How DO you keep doing this, anyway?) |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
.....pssst....wranx....she does it by magic.....didn't you know? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Leaving me immersed in your words... again Wonderful, Martie |
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