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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2003-10-20 07:38 AM


There’s dinner alone,
At a restaurant or home,
Conversation, none.

I hear them talking
Couples holding hands walking
I listen,
Imagine
Their words go on beyond me,
Somewhere I don’t see.

Benches disappear,
Sitting places now fewer,
Strollers rare
In night air,
That has slowly filled with stars,
And streets lessen cars.

The foyer echoes,
Chiming when one comes and goes,
Hatless rack
Hang coat black
Moistened by the twilight dew,
Comfortable not new.  

Bottle and a glass,
Finger of port as I pass
Put up feet
Taste the sweet
Pick up a book read before
1984

But the reading lags
As some new thoughts the mind snags,
Thought then slips
To sweet lips,
Dreams in an empty wine glass
That now slowly pass.

Bed’s already made
Except where the cat laid
After he had played.

Gloom


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LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

1 posted 2003-10-20 08:00 AM


beautifully written....

while reading I had to ponder, we always think the grass is greener on the other side and want what we don't have...then when we get it, are we appreciative...content with happiness beyond our wildest dreams, realizing we've been blessed?  

Yes, I am alone to...but not alone...and yes, I sometimes miss the closeness of someone, conversation, opinion....sharing...loving...but...next time I choose to be with a companion the rest of my life...I want to make certain...he is capable of being true to himself.  He is confident and loves me for me....and is not just looking for the warmth under the sheets for a little while....cause I want to know him inside and out...what he wants feels, needs, and he is able to share his tears and fears as well.  He doesn't wear a mask, but is who he portrays to be...not someone he thinks I want him to be.  We are compatible in thinking, feeling and hobbies....

So...when I see two together, I'm happy for them, and their happiness glows around me....but...it makes me think...truly...about what I need, rather then what everyone else needs, for the first time in my life.  And believe me, I enjoy being married, being with someone, a wife...but the next time, I'm making darn sure...he realizes he and I are one and takes responsibility for the hearts of others.

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression
2 posted 2003-10-20 08:08 AM


Thank you, LeeJ,
You give me great praise in such a response,
Showing you enjoyed my poem and that it brought you thoughts,
The pleasure is mind to do for you.

Gloom

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
3 posted 2003-10-20 12:24 PM


"There’s dinner alone,
At a restaurant or home,
Conversation, none."

Yep...me to...sometimes when it gets real bad...I beg to tag along with my friend and her husband...

But alone is still better than what I had before...

So Gloomy one?....

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148
Oklahoma
4 posted 2003-10-20 12:27 PM


You know this is something I've been contemplating for awhile now.I'm glad to see this and your point of view on it.No matter which side we're on theres pros and cons to every lifestyle.You lose some and you gain some no matter which way you turn.It's not an easy decision to make and one that requires alot of thought and weighing.You really touched me with this in a way you'll never know.
Crystal

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
5 posted 2003-10-20 12:57 PM


I understand well
Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519

6 posted 2003-10-20 05:13 PM


      Hello, may I address you as P.G.  (Not to be confused with Parental Guidance)?  Sorry, I just can't force myself to call you GLOOM--you make the world a BRIGHTer place just by sharing your thoughts.)        
      I really liked the concept of "minds snags" and the "thought slips". What a nice gentle contrast.  
       Enjoyed...Hey, I bet there are a slew of us that'd like to be sipping across from you!  
                            Sadelite  

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