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Old_Shoe_New_Laces
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0 posted 2003-10-19 10:51 PM


In infants it was tested
that if language is inverted or
spoken incorrectly,
it will not be recorded
in the cortex of the brain, but
when spoken correctly,
the first synapses
promoting thought
are made.

So what does this say about:
poetry
          language
                         silence

A gurgling brook at dawn.

A rainbow trout
leaping to catch a
mayfly
in its jaws.

Is it the
slapping of the surface?

And what word then
from a mayfly first
having only one day
to live.  

Silence you say
is like depression.

A stillborn child
will hear
nothing
will feel
nothing.  

So what then
do you make
of the voice in the
wind, in the sound
of a few dry leaves
blown across the
pavement.

If you watch cornstalks
before a storm,
you will find them
stretching their leaves
to the sky,
exposing
their underbellies.

The cricket would tell you
if you permit,
when frost
will first arrive.

You have not been watching.
You have not been listening.

Whosoever might steal
the song from a
songbirds throat, make
note for note
a cadence.

With tongues like tulips,
stamen to pistil,
pistil to stamen,
dancing couples
know
when and how
to step.

A mother will wake at night
attending to her child
before hearing the
first cry.

You worry too much.

When it rains
those who have been shot
will experience
muffled pain,
just as a man
whose arm was amputated
will reach out to
grab a glass
from the counter
with what is
no longer
there.


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Nan
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1 posted 2003-10-19 11:00 PM


I enjoyed your Providing introspections, OSNL...
Old_Shoe_New_Laces
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2 posted 2003-10-19 11:07 PM


Thanks for the comment.  It has been a long time since I was here last.  Whatever happened to the adult sections?  I have some poetry I would have posted there being it is of mature content, but that ability seems lost now.  Are you allowed to post those poems on this forum.  I am perplexed.  So this is what happens when you take a long leave of absence.  Ha...  Thanks again.  

Ciao

Lady In White
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3 posted 2003-10-20 09:31 AM


B.A., all I can say is
that I wish I could have
written this.

I'm grateful that you did.

Our forums were down for a few days.  If you go to Mature Content, you will be able to post in Insights.  Ron is bringing up the remaining forums as time [and recovery] is allowed.  We're so glad to have you back again!
[This message has been edited by Lady In White (10-20-2003 09:33 AM).]

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2003-10-20 04:10 PM


OldShoe~
This is a wonderful write~
Layered and a ponderer ... I like that~
Gonna share it with some others and see if we can get it the reads it deserves~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
   noles1@totcon.com     

Martie
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5 posted 2003-10-20 04:19 PM


OSNL

I really enjoyed this thought filled poem!  

Patricia
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6 posted 2003-10-20 04:32 PM


Bravo.  I did so enjoy this.  Excellent!

Patricia

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7 posted 2003-10-20 04:49 PM


A lot to think about here... presented very well. *S* I enjoyed! *S*
Enchantress
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8 posted 2003-10-20 05:00 PM


This is absolutely beautiful!
A wonderful write!
So pleased to see you back in the blue pages.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

Marty Baird
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9 posted 2003-10-20 05:26 PM


Nice job with great examples
Trillium
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10 posted 2003-10-20 07:12 PM


This is very interesting and thought provoking. I will have to read it again I know!

Betty Lou Hebert

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11 posted 2003-10-20 07:12 PM


Old_Shoe_New_Laces
"thumbsup: Enjoyed.

angelblueyes
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12 posted 2003-10-20 07:16 PM


This was great.Glad you're back.
Crystal

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13 posted 2003-10-20 07:37 PM


OSNL this is so very beautiful, I don’t get in here as often as I should, but just occasionally someone whispers into my ear that there’s a particularly beautiful piece illuming the board. I’m glad I came and listened to the whisper of wonder that is this superb poem  

Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

Magnus
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14 posted 2003-10-20 07:58 PM


This poem is remarkable...it certainly
brings the mind to a lot of thought..

and I think your pen name is super!

Gentle Spirit
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15 posted 2003-10-20 09:14 PM


Very well done leaving one with much to ponder.  Welcome back to the pages of blue.
NewEnglandlazurlu
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A Mountain Paradise
16 posted 2003-10-20 10:32 PM


I am grateful that someone shared your poem with me. But more so, I am grateful that you wrote it.

It is filled with much to think about and in my humble opinion, a poem that brings delight or makes one want to read it again and again, is a brilliantly written piece. Thank you!

Hugs, Marti

Hear Blessings dropping their blossoms all around you.

SharaRose
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Somewhere out there~
17 posted 2003-10-20 10:45 PM


I love movies that are psycological thrillers, and this felt a little like that. A bit Hitchcockian, but not in a freakish way...just that feel of psycological edge..digging into the psyche! WOW.
Love,
Terr~

Old_Shoe_New_Laces
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18 posted 2003-10-21 08:04 PM


Wow, I really didn't expect this much of a response on the poem.  Thank you all for your kind words.  I was unsure of the poem myself.  I suppose one does not always have the best outlook over his/her own poetry.  I have been quite busy with papers and exams... university life.  I will try to come around to comment more when I get the time.  Once again, thank you.  
Betty
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19 posted 2003-10-28 08:55 AM


I loved reading this.
Betty

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