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Mistletoe Angel
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0 posted 2003-10-18 01:04 AM


Faraday Cage
By: Noah Eaton
10/17/03
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                                                   ...Floating in space
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                 ...swimming down the focal point...
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                                                  ...freed from this Faraday cage...

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                 ...pulled far from radar range...
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                                                 ...I'm aware nothing has changed...
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                 ...all the lights have gone double blind...
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                                                 ...just another spontanenous case...
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                 ...with no contact in sight...
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                                                ...Here's just hoping someone

...would pretend to care...
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                              ...but after a blank stare...

                           you'll realize,

I was never even
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there...
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                                                 ...When every other signal

...is sleight of hand anyhow...
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                                                 ...every little voice...
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                                ...feels like witchcraft...
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right now...
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                                                ...Half a false awakening later...
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                       ...still sitting in this stigmata chair...
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                                               ...I was pretending to be sleeping...
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                       ...hoping to see Jesus tuck me in...
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                                               ...hear the china katydids...
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                       ...humming acoustics out of UHF waves...
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                                               ...looking back on the little I've did...
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                       ...how little I saw of mother's lunar phase face...
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                                                ...Here's just hoping someone

...would pretend to care...
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                              ...but after a blank stare...

                           you'll realize,

I was never even
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there...
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                                                 ...When every other signal

...is sleight of hand anyhow...
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                                                 ...every little voice...
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                                ...feels like witchcraft...
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right now...
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                                                          ...Heard your voice through a satellite relay...
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                        ...I didn't have anything to say...
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                                                        ...hearing those hollow raudive voices...
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                       ...through this scratchy magnetic audio tape...
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                                                         ...Or did I fall asleep then...
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                       ...pretending to be asleep within a dream...
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                                                         ...still afraid to crawl out of this cradle...
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                      ...but I'm not sure why...
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                                                ...Here's just hoping someone

...would pretend to care...
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                              ...but after a blank stare...

                           you'll realize,

I was never even
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there...
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                                                 ...When every other signal

...is sleight of hand anyhow...
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                                                 ...every little voice...
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                                ...feels like witchcraft...
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right now...
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               ...I was never even there...
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never even there...
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never even there...
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never even there...
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never even there...
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never even there...
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never even there...
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never even there...
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Tramsmission disrupted,
losing feedback,
mission control, do you copy?




I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***



[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (10-18-2003 01:11 AM).]

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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
1 posted 2003-10-18 01:18 AM


I liked this...

Here's just hoping someone would pretend to care
but after a blank stare..........
you'll realize
I was never even there.

Liked the sleight of hand and the little voice too,
it's pretty scary out there sometimes.  
You go Noah~ hug!

passing shadows
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2 posted 2003-10-18 04:22 AM


and now I'm sending angel hugs to you


Susan Caldwell
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3 posted 2003-10-18 06:21 AM


Noah~

I likey!!  

Susan

inkedgoddess
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4 posted 2003-10-18 07:19 AM


and i was never there with  you
Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17
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east coast
5 posted 2003-10-18 07:27 AM


Noah, I can definitely relate...

*warm hugs*

~Tiers

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
6 posted 2003-10-18 08:49 AM


wonderful Noah...I love the repetition/chorus

check this line though:
"    ...looking back on the little I've
did..."  

should be I did or I've done...  unless you want it that way ..just a suggestion

hugs
M

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02
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right...there
7 posted 2003-10-18 09:02 AM


Noah, all I can say is WOW!!

believe in what your heart feels...

garysgirl
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8 posted 2003-10-18 10:05 AM


Noah, do you really know just how awesome your
writing is, my friend......just like you are!!!  
Hugs to you  
Ethel

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
9 posted 2003-10-18 10:12 AM


Noah,
Lost in space. Enjoyed the read.

SharaRose
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Somewhere out there~
10 posted 2003-10-18 10:13 AM


Sad song...sad to take it in.
Love to you,
Terri~

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

11 posted 2003-10-19 11:31 AM


...looking back on the little I've did...


Noah, you've done much much more then you give yourself credit for.  This was amazing...and you are incredibly talented.  I would love to hear you sing, I'd be willing to bet, your voice is amazing!

Smiles and hugs...luv ya Lee J.

ethome
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12 posted 2003-10-19 11:57 AM


Very interesting words and format Noah.....Shows your crerative ability once again...


Eric

angelblueyes
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13 posted 2003-10-19 03:21 PM


Noah, your imagination, your views, your insight,and your heart always bring me warmth.Just close your eyes and my spirit will be there to tuck you in at night.I loved the form, the creativity, and the personal touch you gave this.
Crystal

River
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14 posted 2003-10-19 03:49 PM


Noah...this is so artistic...it's powerful...passionate...lonely...beautiful. i'm falling in love. lol. God Bless and *hugs* from

                  - River

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

vandana
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15 posted 2003-10-19 05:38 PM


enjoyed (hugs)
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