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pandonov
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since 2003-10-03
Posts 478
b/w conscience and insolence

0 posted 2003-10-17 03:59 PM


fated
in the middle of paused screen
a memory
melted indispensably
i
spectator in my skin
allowed to stay
for i’m empty
dispersed of hate
and wrath starved to a moan
whiteless
not invisible
repel inspectacle of water
a solution of taste and time
obsolete
amnesia.
it is the light
that breaks the wave
of perfection
fish swirling in
the premises
of air
adorable in coexistence
yet artificial.
the
wingless
lungless
fish.

“the grey scale makes painting vertical. Evidently we are dead.”

Barrett Watten



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the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
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Jacksonville, Florida, USA
1 posted 2003-10-17 10:34 PM


Very powerful words here. I liked it.

Cold hands means a warm heart

pandonov
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since 2003-10-03
Posts 478
b/w conscience and insolence
2 posted 2003-10-18 12:16 PM


thx
Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
3 posted 2003-10-18 01:21 AM


Privet pandonov, This deserves more praise then it's recieved. Vivid imagery throughout and an incredibly witty quote..grins excellent work
EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279

4 posted 2003-10-18 01:50 AM


Bravo...can't hit you when you wrote this wonderful piece. Well done indeed! This needs to pop back to the top of the page.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

pandonov
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since 2003-10-03
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b/w conscience and insolence
5 posted 2003-10-18 02:00 AM


thx all of you, aenimal privet to you too, i never expect many replies, because people don't like to reply to things they don't understand...or fear

[This message has been edited by pandonov (10-18-2003 02:26 AM).]

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
6 posted 2003-10-18 07:19 AM


"i never expect many replies, because people don't like to reply to things they don't understand...or fear"

I feel a bit insulted by that statement...

however..I am going to reply anyway..lol

I enjoyed the piece a lot and hope to see more...

Susan

pandonov
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since 2003-10-03
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b/w conscience and insolence
7 posted 2003-10-18 12:56 PM


do not be, for it wasn't meant in any offensive manner. what a mind creates, are pieces and some of them are irrational to nature

[This message has been edited by pandonov (10-18-2003 12:57 PM).]

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