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Lotus Breeze
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0 posted 2003-10-17 11:03 AM


When your eyes looking,
Past is the coloring seen,
Look me at this now,
Let look convince you somehow,
I want more than friend,
Visions old must come to end,
Different eyes need looking.


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-10-17 11:05 AM



There are many ways
in which to view
the world around us,
thank you for sharing your
vision, Lotus Breeze.

angelblueyes
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2 posted 2003-10-17 11:05 AM


May the eyes look differently and bring you what you desire.Well penned sweet lady.
Crystal

Lotus Breeze
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3 posted 2003-10-17 11:12 AM


Sunshine friend, many ways to see, but how make others to see, my dilemma.  I just write best I can hope he see me as I want him to see.

Your wish Crystal is my wish, thank you for words of friend

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4 posted 2003-10-17 01:04 PM


your writing is beautiful

and it opens up my eyes to see what you see

thank you

that is a wonderful picture of you, nice to see your face

garysgirl
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5 posted 2003-10-17 01:16 PM


Lotus Breeze, this is beautiful.
Thanks for sharing your view with us.  
Hugs  
Ethel

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6 posted 2003-10-17 01:44 PM


the eyes of others are often blind to what we would have them see... to wrapped in the gauze of thier own "can't believe"

sometimes we have to speak our hearts plainly.. and acceept the fact the other may indeed not want to see as we would have them.


enjoyed this.. and enjoyed the wording of

"Let look convince you somehow"

I can read it with more than one possible emotion..which adds to the whole of the piece for me.


Lotus Breeze
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7 posted 2003-10-17 06:34 PM


~See what I see, is lonely at time, when know he sits alone and doesn’t visit me.  I happy you like my photo, it’s a little old yet looks like me
~Ethel you kind to read and say nice things of my poem
~His eyes, so gentle at times, look no enough time to me.  You give great compliment

JamesMichael
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8 posted 2003-10-18 12:08 PM


Enjoyed reading this Lotus...silky...James
JamesMichael
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9 posted 2003-10-23 06:51 PM


Lotus Breeze where are you...please post some new poetry...James
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10 posted 2003-10-23 06:59 PM


enjoyed
jwesley
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11 posted 2003-10-23 07:04 PM


enjoyed this...loved your critique message...it's as beautiful as your thoughts...

jwesley

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12 posted 2003-10-23 09:26 PM


All very kind to like my poetry, James I write what words I can yet I am not as much a writer as some here.  Hard to get thoughts on page.  All so kind to me make me happy.
Professor Gloom
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13 posted 2003-10-24 09:58 AM


When my eyes go looking to see,
If towards the blue mountains or sea,
I can’t help the flow of memory
Or the rush of possibility

Enjoyed your poem,
I agree with James, you need to write more.

Gloom

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14 posted 2003-10-24 10:03 AM


May his eyes and heart open wide to both your inner and outer beauty...

~ Lovely as a Lotus Breeze,


Earth Angel

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15 posted 2003-10-24 11:24 AM


Lovely poem. Sometimes men are a little dense though. Wack him upside the head with a frying pan...he'll probably see the light a lot quicker. (Smiles!)

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Lotus Breeze
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16 posted 2003-10-25 12:12 PM


The teacher give me poem response, I so happy you write to me poem that I try write more.
Sweet Earth Angel give sweet reply
I not use fry pan but poem and sweetness, seems better choice

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