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James_A_Fraser
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0 posted 2003-10-17 09:37 AM



Whisper My Name


whisper        my        name
        only whisper     soft as    
moonlight      over water
            sweeter
     than
                leaf shadows
  under      starlight
       gentle           like
dew      at its
                   becoming
and as secret as
                     the breath of
a sleeping wren
    if you only     whisper me
      whisper    love
I need               no more
              want no more
than this         soundless
                  token
I will         never     hear
       but      know now
     even now        within
              just as
the silent
                 words
unbidden          words
         are spoken

© Copyright 2003 James A. Fraser - All Rights Reserved
Earth Angel
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1 posted 2003-10-17 09:40 AM


whispering your name...j-a-m-e-s.....


EA

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Canada eh.
2 posted 2003-10-17 09:42 AM


Hush...listen to me whisper...
Serene...soft and lovely.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2003-10-17 09:42 AM


James,
Good one, enjoyed.

suthern
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4 posted 2003-10-17 09:47 AM


and as secret as
                     the breath of
a sleeping wren

I was captured by your beautiful images... and can't imagine a lovelier simile. *S*
But what's even more beautiful is the emotion... love shouted in softest whisper.

This is one of your best. *S*

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2003-10-17 09:49 AM


whisper        my        name
        only whisper     soft as    
moonlight      over water
            sweeter
     than
                leaf shadows
  under      starlight
       gentle           like
dew      at its
                   becoming
and as secret as
                     the breath of
a sleeping wren
===========================


this is just so lovely...
a wonderful poetic mix of imagery and presentation. This reads as gentle as falling leaf or a ripple on the water.
Well done poet sir.

every time I talk to you its over too soon
every day feels incomplete till you walk into the room
just say the words, I'll jump that moon.

D.Gray

angelblueyes
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6 posted 2003-10-17 11:42 AM


The whisper is there for not one soul could resist your passion.
Crystal

Martie
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7 posted 2003-10-17 11:46 AM


Jamie...Such magic you write!  A sigh and a hug for this beautiful poem.
Suetang
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8 posted 2003-10-17 07:59 PM


This was lovely James.

Take care........Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Rosebud1229
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9 posted 2003-10-18 01:25 AM


such beauty in the name, when desire takes ahold, beautifully said.
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
10 posted 2003-10-18 06:57 PM


Oh you just keep on writing so nice!
Those three little words make all the difference in the world,  except when they are spoken to another...and then they break your heart all over again.  I don't know, but I don't fall that easy every time I turn around, and in retrospect I should consider myself lucky.  

Que sera, sera~  

Huggin' you James_A

suthern
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11 posted 2003-10-20 12:34 PM


This gentle magic has stayed on my mind... I had to come back for another read. *S*
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12 posted 2003-10-20 05:06 PM


James this is so very soft and beautiful, I don’t get in here as often as I should, but just occasionally someone whispers into my ear that there’s a particularly beautiful piece illuming the board. I’m glad I came and listened to the whisper of wonder that is this superb poem  

Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

mytuesdaywishes
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a voice from the musicbox
13 posted 2003-10-20 07:04 PM


creativity is always nice to see, beautiful as always...

i think that it's brainless to assume that making changes to your window's view will gain a new perspective.

KoKo
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Inside the shadow's shadow
14 posted 2003-10-20 10:26 PM


This was...just freakin perfect...I'm jealous! I sooooooo wish I could write like that
Lady In White
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15 posted 2003-10-21 08:54 AM


I         have read
this several times

it suits you
very       well

now, please

do
it
again.

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