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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2003-10-15 10:55 PM

As the trees empty
the sky filters in its shades of blue,
the circus clouds hang webs on black branches,
broken homes expose stray sparrows
that wander through,
even the wind sings without interruption here,
o these treasures found between the open spaces
when the treetops wear plaid again,
soon the world will hold its breath
come midnight,
ready to topple over,
suspended on the subtraction
of that pendulum hour.

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (10-17-2003 01:27 PM).]

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-10-15 11:09 PM

enjoyed your write n read,,,

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2003-10-17 09:44 AM

even the wind sings without interruption here

love how you see nature and the world...

M

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

3 posted 2003-10-17 11:55 AM

I always love to read the way your mind and heart show.

Crystal

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2003-10-17 12:36 PM

Looks like I'll be thinking of your poem for the rest of my life when changing the clocks back to Standard Time from Daylight Savings Time! Neat poem!

Happy autumn!

EA

rhyme time
Junior Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 13

5 posted 2003-10-17 02:26 PM

i agree with earth angel

this is a very deep write,

i feel so different though, becaus emost of my writes if not all are rhyming, hence the name, and i see no rhyming poems

pandonov
Member

since 2003-10-03

Posts 478
b/w conscience and insolence

6 posted 2003-10-17 02:28 PM

indeed an hour of sleep

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

7 posted 2003-10-17 03:13 PM

..no words..

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2003-10-17 03:15 PM

just a smile from me.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

9 posted 2003-10-17 03:18 PM

brilliant write

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

10 posted 2003-10-17 04:40 PM

"but you make me think too much.....
im just a simple girl, barely squeaking out of highschool dont u know? "

lol... then if I make you think too much I am not effective in conveying the thoughts or the feelings in a manner that does not create hardships or struggles for the reader..and I fail..

which, I can accept easily enough... but give me reason to perhaps work harder to communicate better.

now, as for barely squeaking out high school... you would not want to look at my grade point average in high school..lol.. graduating for me was an option... one they constantly reminded me of.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

11 posted 2003-10-17 04:53 PM

lol... then if I make you think too much I am not effective in conveying the thoughts or the feelings in a manner that does not create hardships or struggles for the reader..and I fail..

no no
you dont fail.......
sometimes im just lazy .. if i don't get it right away, i wander off and move on.
it is good to think, and challenge myself ,
i read your work and know it is quality work
and well crafted,
if it doesnt just jump out tho when i read,i tend to stray off the depending on how much time i have to read

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