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A Walk on the Side of Simplicity
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A Walk on the Side of Simplicity |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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Words leave me today is the last day and the beginning a time of what I make it Feeling sand between my toes and sunlight on my face I wonder of how many more freckles will take their place This solitude I choose has ran its course readying me for a new path hope takes the place of remorse Seems the end became the beginning of something more subtle and strong like the spores on back of the greenest frond I beget a new start The roar of oceans wave sends the message of a time of passage eroding the old leaving room to build throwing out the mold It's a new day and I carry sand and ocean spray with me as I make my way feeling each new freckle upon a wiser face |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
This solitude I choose has ran its course readying me for a new path hope takes the place of remorse enjoyed these lines very much,, |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Susan...I feel your strength in this...good!! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Susan? This solitude I choose has ran its course readying me for a new path hope takes the place of remorse YES YES YES inside of my head again . . . beautiful writing and love those freckles . . . *smile* xxoo |
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Quiet Acquiescence Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 70somewhere out here |
I liked it. It reminds me of something. I'm not sure what it reminds me of, but I know it reminds me of something. *lol* ~*~Hope restores broken wings; faith helps us fly.~*~ |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Feeling each freckle upon a wiser face. Nice way of looking at things. Oh, let me count the freckles. 1001, 1002, 1002 1/2 Sadelite |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you one and all!! Susan |
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n2dmystic Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 253beyond the doors of perception |
this is wonderful. the imagery is really nice, but the message, the healing, the looking ahead, "throwing out the mold," the hopefulness, that's what's awesome. thank you Peace, Joe |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
an enjoyable positive write  |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This is positive and full of such healing and strength.May they find their in way into your wondrous heart and soul.  Crystal |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Wonderful, Susan! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
the entire poem was exceptionally beautiful but I liked Seems the end became the beginning of something more subtle and strong like the spores on back of the greenest frond wonderful words woven into hope and love for life. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Yay! Oh Susan, your heart shines with strength here, sweet friend, may you stand firmly on that crest and go slip-sliding away on calm waters! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This solitude I choose has ran its course readying me for a new path hope takes the place of remorse I like this very much, Susan... very wise and strong. *S* |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I enjoyed this also. A very well articulated poem, beautiful flow and structure... And such a positive message....one of strength and inner conviction.... Thanx Susan.. |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
SC, Enjoyed your poem and I'm glad you came out to play at pip. SG |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
L O V E D I T! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
It's a new day and I carry sand and ocean spray with me as I make my way feeling each new freckle upon a wiser face Susan, this is absolutely precious. It's so pretty, and has such a hopeful feel to it. I like it so much, I'm going to keep it. Hugs to you sweet lady  Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (10-18-2003 01:50 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
honey, thank you for sharing some of that positive outlook with me tonight...I needed that love ya |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Well, I have been remiss in responding to my responses (looking for a new ride and all), but there is no way I am responding to everyone individually as I like to do...lol Just know this...I really didn't think this piece was all that great...but all of you are! Thank you!! to all!Susan |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You still freckle, too? So do I when I can get out and play - but usually I'm within four walls of some such structure or another - and the freckles fade... I think I'll go out and capture a few today! Meet you at the sandbox! |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
ooh fun, can I join you at the sandbox too? I burn though, no tans and a few freckles.. mainly just burn. But I could sure use the fresh air, so refreshing isn't it? Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Karilea~ Oh yes, I have freckles all over my face! And some on my arms..I used to hate them..but now they just feel like I wouldn't be me if they weren't there!! The sandbox sounds like fun!! Can I take a raincheck, you two? I am sick with that yucky cold/virus thingy that has been going around... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Yeah Kari...STAY AWAY FROM HER!!!!!! She's got GERMS!!! And she'd probably sneeze 'em all over the sandbox!!  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Duncan~ Pfffffffttt...you would still play in the sand! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Yeah....but I've never had good sense!! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh great....my sand box doesn't make good sense? Thanks..geez "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Susan, A delight to read. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you Sy!! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Playing in your sandbox, with sickly you...makes no sense. Lucky for you, I don't place alot of importance on good sense. Now stop this bantering, it's stressing my poor, tired brain. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What's Duncan doing in here? Doesn't he owe us a poem or FOUR? Quit puppying around, you, and get with the poems. After all, we've got castles to build. AND, I'm bringing chicken soup for Susan! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
LOL Thank you Karilea!! Duncan is picking on me. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Ahhhh darlin, I wouldn't pick on you when you're feelin' poorly!! I was just pickin' some of those nasty cooties off of ya, before they got all in the sandbox...  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh so you are just being sweetly thoughtful huh? I feel so loved... "if you won't let me fall for you |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
ooh yay so I DO get to play in the sandbox!! Make duncan go away though *pouts* he gets sand in my earrrrrs! *grin* Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Good...'cause ya are!!!!  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
DID NOT ALYSSA!!!!!!! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Pup, aren't you supposed to be picking a poem? |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Who me??? A poem?? Oh yeah.......  I'm busted!!!!! Hi Kari! Come on in!! The sand's fine now that I got all those Susie cooties out!!! |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Don't listen! He'll only put sand in your earrrrs!!! Go write a poem for us!  Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Pup, I'll pull the Queen Moth into the sandbox if you don't put that tail between your legs and get that poem pawed out! I'll dump some sand in the leftover birthday cake as well...  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Ok fine, I'm going!!!! And I'm taking my shovel and pail with me!! (Mumble, grumble...bossy girls, think I'm gonna just write ya a poem, 'cause ya snapped yer pretty little fingers.) Hmmmppffff!!! Got my number don't ya? |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ohhhhhhh you guys were playing while I was out! I know for a fact that Duncan has a half finished poem.... "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
HEY!!! That's priveledged information! Now Myrtle, I suggest ya climb back into bed and see about gettin' well!! Unless that is...ya don't want me to finish a certain poem...  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Where's the poem? |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
He is having a hard time with it...keeps second guessing himself.. mumbled something about not wanting it to be cheap...lmao oh he is going to kill me.. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Ya can't rush brilliance, ya know????  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ok stop! This thread is out of control and its emabarrassing! (where has Liz been?) Brilliance? Who told you that? "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Fabulous writing here Susan. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 yep |
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