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jellybeans
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0 posted 2003-10-14 05:02 PM


I wish I were a bird
free to feather
my way across the sky
no tomorrow no
yesterday
and God doth provide
no

I wish not for lilting cares
with no passion to heat
my imaginings
would that
your touch sent shuddering
eruptions of hot
lava steaming into
my tempestuous sea
no

today even passion
is not a must
I wish simply for the curve
of my lips to lift
my heavy eyes
for the feel of You
in my heart
to make it sing

waning joy
is what drives this need
in my mind
I slip down
to my knees

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Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2003-10-14 05:23 PM


I wish simply for the curve
of my lips to lift
my heavy eyes
for the feel of You
in my heart
to make it sing


what you wish for my friend is understood by many...but not so well said by most... your own way with words has always been something I admire...

jellybeans
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2 posted 2003-10-14 05:27 PM


thank you my friend, though not understood, coming from you admiration pleases me greatly

seems the falling leaves have inspire more than one poet...sigh

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3 posted 2003-10-14 05:31 PM


you have always sold yourself short...when it came to writing.. and to other things as well.

fall seems to inspire a good many poets... and often reminds us of the coming days when warmth is something we remember or find hiding....

SharaRose
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4 posted 2003-10-14 05:34 PM


I could the weakness of the knees...wow.
Love,
Terri~

Enchantress
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5 posted 2003-10-14 06:11 PM


"today even passion
is not a must
I wish simply for the curve
of my lips to lift
my heavy eyes
for the feel of You
in my heart
to make it sing

waning joy
is what drives this need
in my mind
I slip down
to my knees"


Beautiful...oh so beautiful.
Smiling at you.
~Hugs~

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

Sunshine
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6 posted 2003-10-14 07:06 PM



Keep it up, girl.  With you writing,
I don't have to.

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2003-10-14 09:32 PM


MzJellyBeans~
Such inspiration should be shared~
Much appreciation for doing so ... so gracefully~
You are one dynamic writer lady~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~


~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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[This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (10-15-2003 10:47 AM).]

littlewing
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8 posted 2003-10-14 09:33 PM


Jesus this is bittersweet passion
beautiful job jelly
like silk . . .
xxoo  

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9 posted 2003-10-15 08:08 AM


I wish not for lilting cares
with no passion to heat
my imaginings
would that
your touch sent shuddering
eruptions of hot
lava steaming into
my tempestuous sea
no

today even passion
is not a must
I wish simply for the curve
of my lips to lift
my heavy eyes
for the feel of You
in my heart
to make it sing


back for another read... and these lines strike me as central to teh whole...and in essence the plea that cries to the reader..and certainly is understood by me....

hugs my friend... big warm hugs..

Gentle Spirit
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10 posted 2003-10-15 08:10 AM


excellent write!  much enjoyed.
EvocativeVerse2
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11 posted 2003-10-15 11:33 AM


This is not FAIR! How can one person write so many great poems? Excellently done!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

suthern
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12 posted 2003-10-15 12:08 PM


I wish simply for the curve
of my lips to lift

I wish this, too... and so much more... *S*

This is beautiful, lady... well done!

jellybeans
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13 posted 2003-10-15 02:44 PM


yes my friend, the cold does seem to be seeping inside…thank you, for believing in me

Terri, thank you, I didn’t know if it came through, but your read tells me it did

Enchantress, thank you am glad it touched you

Sunshine, *smile* don’t you stop, I have written so little lately that…well, just don’t you stop, PIP needs your words

Marge, thank you, I have felt overwhelmed and less than inspired, so thank you for reading me thus

littlewing, thank you, so much

cpat...thank you for the return visit, and yes, we do share much of the same...I wish for your lips to curve up as well

Gentle spirit, thank you!

EV thank you...you made me smile, I have written almost nothing lately, good that you remember my writing

suthern, yep lady, and I too wish it for you, thank you

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