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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-10-14 04:01 PM

Do not
he whispered
    Look for me in the leaves
Or for my face in water
…………………………..

There among the stones piled
One atop the other as if in jigsawed madness
The puzzle of how they fit
Was born in a scheme of sweat
And constantly shuffled rock
hides the Zen of he
                               Who thought to build this wall
Along the brow of hill
And at the base of trees that stand
Too silent for all but the wind to whisper

He bent his back in pry
       Hands roughed in carry
             Mind freed in time
One to follow another
       As questions would
                                          That do not have answers
Or even reasons why

Until it stood as you see it now
                 A broken weave of color against still other
Broken ground
                                Before it began to fall

A drop of blood stained this one
                 A splatter of some scrape
While this one was far more than his back could bear
And in the end
                   He left it there
                                              The place made hollow
As he sat and rested

Here
………………………………………………
do not look for me
              he whispered
in the face of stone piled high
or for the part of me
                            that once
just once
                touched the sky

for I am in the effort
            the toil that passes time
……………………………………

There
         In the broken line
That he still mends
                            Lies the Zen of him
A place of beginning

And of end

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (10-14-2003 04:10 PM).]

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-10-14 04:09 PM

I am a very pleased reader when it comes
to you being inspired.

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

2 posted 2003-10-14 04:25 PM

"for I am in the effort
the toil that passes time"
As it is with all labour...I thoroughly enjoyed this read...the images etched their way into my mind..

believe in what your heart feels...

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

3 posted 2003-10-14 04:30 PM

I applaud you
Bravo, you brought this to life....in images and words...your talent is indeed showing....no "bar room" trick, but I am betting more then one person would be front and center to hear you read this...

hugssss
Lauren~

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2003-10-14 04:38 PM

(sigh) I second the favor that I would love to hear this live someday! (big hugggsssssss) Zen is one of your many middle names, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

5 posted 2003-10-14 04:43 PM

a stone atop another lay
neatly placed in zig-zagged way
a tale of long gone years they hide
like ways of criss-crossed river sides

his blood, he mixes well with sweat
and bears his weight of kismet
he sinks his past in walls so huge
and bides his time of great deluge

beginning would then birth an end
as broken lines would come to mend
----------------
:d

Many thanks for your poetry, my friend...

regards
sudhir

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2003-10-14 04:51 PM

Two things.

This,

quote:
do not look for me
              he whispered
in the face of stone piled high
or for the part of me
                            that once
just once
                touched the sky

for I am in the effort
            the toil that passes time

and to acknowledge and ditto Lauren's comment about front and center.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

7 posted 2003-10-14 04:53 PM

enjoyed the read

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2003-10-14 05:25 PM

*moth front and center*

*waiting with baited breath*

(brought my bait bucket too)

LOL

every time I talk to you its over too soon
every day feels incomplete till you walk into the room
just say the words, I'll jump that moon.

D.Gray

Robert Frazier
Senior Member

since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

9 posted 2003-10-14 05:41 PM

your poetry is enjoyed beginning, journey and end...no exception here!

Rf

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

10 posted 2003-10-14 05:58 PM

"If you see the Buddha on the road, kill him!"

lub ya Cap!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

11 posted 2003-10-14 06:07 PM

Standing alongside JM waiting to hear you read this gem aloud.

Amazing write Captain!
Hugs~

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

12 posted 2003-10-14 06:40 PM

Gee, I didn't know that you possessed such
depth in your poetic meanderings across
the pages of time...

(Yes I did)

A great write, I could feel the toils...

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