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Sudhir Iyer
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furry rabbits rush
in open hectares
of a playground where
a gentlemanís game
was played
at times
when vertical heat
            (and red cricket balls)
raced to hunt them
down

these days
a chill looms -
forlorn

crisp
the autumn air
that surrounds
chattering teeth

crunchy
the sounds of bites
of diced potato-beings
freshly ousted
from their wraps
to feed the
insatiable
belly

devour

gratify
your desire
and sink it
quick
with pints
of dew

for it doesnít augur well
to spend the small rations of light
repenting a past summer

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (10-14-2003 03:53 PM).]

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gratify
your desire
and sink it
quick
with pints
of dew

for it doesnít augur well
to spend the small rations of light
repenting a past summer
sudhir... this I think says more than the words themselves... and has a meaning to you perhaps that we may never fully understand... and if I am wrong..then know it syas to me more that I care to sometimes myself..understand.

Sudhir Iyer
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well, most of this is about visiting the cricket field where I just spent my summer each weekend playing what is named the gentleman's game of Cricket

and the rest of it is about how short the autumn days are (and crisp winter days would be)...

but then I will be biting those crispy chips and wanting the summer's warmth... almost like someone with painful memories longing for yesterday's fun and joy and ...  

thanks for your response, and I understand you quite well...

regards
sudhir

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (10-14-2003 04:47 PM).]

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(sigh) Oh Sudhir, this is so beautifully nostalgic, sweet friend, this reminded me of when I used to play tennis with my cousin all the time and drink raspberry lemonade, and how I cherish these memories but still embrace each new summer! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love.
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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nice read
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I like this very much, Sudhir... especially the ending. *S*
Sudhir Iyer
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Noah, you are way too kind... thanks

vandana, thank you very much

Ruth, many thanks for your thoughts ...

regards
sudhir
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Sudhir, m'friend
I have missed you
and thank you for reminding me
to forget
*smile*
xxoo
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what a fantastic write Sudhir!  I always so much enjoy your thoughts shared here.  And I agree...we shouldn't waste time repenting a past summer!  Well done...~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~S~

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HI~

I enjoyed this sir, and I love the ending....although sometimes, we do need to re visit those past summers..... hugssss
Lauren~

Will the wind ever remember
the names it has blown in the past
with its crutch, its old age, and its
wisdom it whispers no this won't be the last

Sudhir Iyer
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thank you all so very much

regards
sudhir
 
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