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inkedgoddess
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0 posted 2003-10-13 09:57 PM



Slowly the striptease,
she bares more each day
revealing herself
beneath the camoflauge
that trimmed her green.
Blessed and cursed
by November's breeze,
soon to wear the woes of winter,
arthritic and spinsterly
in all probablility
will survive her fallen ones
with the grace of an aging goddess.
Does she really have much choice?

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (10-13-2003 10:11 PM).]

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Enchantress
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Canada eh.
1 posted 2003-10-13 10:03 PM


So beautifully depicted Michele..
Fabulous imagery...with a touch of melancholy.
Well done!
Hugs~

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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2 posted 2003-10-13 10:10 PM


Liked this one very much Michelle...
Thinking of the crooked limbs of bared trees in the autumn.
Nicely done. TD

Sunshine
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3 posted 2003-10-13 10:13 PM


Michelle, for you,
I should bring back the Birch poem...

Aenimal
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4 posted 2003-10-13 10:20 PM


puts away the stack of bills..not what i expected but and absolutely brilliant metaphor and great write which is always expected and exceeded when i click on one of yours
Alwye
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In the space between moments
5 posted 2003-10-13 10:42 PM


what a neat way of looking at the changing from fall to winter...very unique, I liked the image a lot.  Well done!

~*Krista Lee Knutson*~

We are, each of us angels with only one wing; and we can only fly by embracing one another.
--Luciano De Crescenzo

Sadelite
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6 posted 2003-10-13 10:48 PM


Nicely done!  A very creative write!

                       Sadelite

Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
7 posted 2003-10-13 11:22 PM


..such a veiw..
dertah
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8 posted 2003-10-13 11:33 PM


oh yes, that title.....just drew me in like a dog.  good write.
ctowen
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9 posted 2003-10-14 05:44 AM


Which was most exciting ....

      the moment of baring essentials

                    or
  
        the process of getting there.

Mother Nature is extremely beautiful this time of year, and haven't quite reached peak season yet!

ice
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since 2003-05-17
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10 posted 2003-10-14 06:08 AM


Beautiful, well done in formm and content...
The answer to the question, is no! You do not have a choice.
Enjoyed the read.....ice


bklynboy
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florida
11 posted 2003-10-14 08:58 PM


Do you ever get tired of writing good stuff?
nakdthoughts
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12 posted 2003-10-14 09:29 PM


even your titles tempt and tease


M

littlewing
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13 posted 2003-10-14 09:38 PM


spinster?
(she has gone mad!)

but yes Michele . . . the trees
are not as innocent as they seem
*smile*

beautiful metaphor
(I should come down there and
clunk you on the head . . . spinsterly
sheesh)

xxoo

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