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Friendly Eyes
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Friendly Eyes |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Certainty, wasn’t there in the pit of an empty and rolling gut. Not knowing the next day’s toils. Listening to the rails, waiting for the speak of mouths unseen, the taunting and daunting voices. When might the murmur fall upon ears that no longer strain to hear the syllables spoken silently among the trees that sway gently against an Autumn breeze? When might it all just simply fade into twilight as the orange hues of sunset cast into the shimmer of golden green eyes? Countless ties of creosote and pitch, lying silent before the weary feet of a traveler who knows only of yesterday and waits for tomorrow to speak gently. Yet, the harsh reality of winter’s chill... Stirring the flesh into shivers. Brings back the shuffle of shoes upon the granite shards. Another train comes, should one step lightly aside, and wave silently to the eyes of an engineer, traveling life’s rails into yesterday.... As feet shuffle the morrow and eyes strain into the darkness of today. Waiting patiently for the tiny red caboose, hoping to sip a cup of silence with friendly eyes. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I wish I could describe the chills I felt when I read this... simply because my thoughts have been of times before the pavement... Well done sir. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
well done sir... you paint the images well..and as usual.. made me stop and think... enjoyed!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry....ya gave me chills, especially with that last verse. Stunning! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ There is a tender poignancy here~ 'When might it all just simply fade into twilight as the orange hues of sunset cast into the shimmer of golden green eyes?' *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"Sipping a cup of silence:... silent reverence, my friend - This is great..  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
The final line of this is most brilliant Mag. Iron clad brilliant. TD |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
very nice indeed.....wonderful images sir...hugsss Lauren~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I am in awe of your imagery and words... thanks for the reason to be sipping a cup of silence... (hopefully) with friendly eyes regards sudhir |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Barry, you know how I feel about ALL of your writing...   Linda |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus Well done my friend. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
How lonely this is, Magnus. Core |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Barry, I think we all look for friendly eyes, a smile, an "open arms" gesture. We don't realize how much we can impact someone's day. I know I make a difference, just standing outside my classroom waving and smiling at students. How do I know? Those same students look for me to be there every day. And they return the smile in flash of friendly eyes. This is what this lovely poem says to me. You know what? I won't stop smiling with friendly eyes...no, never! A wonderful treasure you have written in the tradition of "Magnus elegance." Patricia |
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