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1slick_lady
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0 posted 2003-10-12 02:12 PM



Dose Of You

every time it is time
for you to go
you don’t fade
in your departure
lingering I am
struck by a
dose of electricity
scratching me
light carving a heart
my eyes blink in pain
like staring at the sun
a bolt cutting smoke
staying smoldering
in the arms of fire

"wish your room had room for two" John Mayer

© Copyright 2003 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-10-12 02:27 PM


It's a simple solution, you know.....

If you can't say no, don't say no. If you can't say goodbye, then it won't be goodbye even if you pronounce the word. Treasure it and go on in the direction life takes you.

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2 posted 2003-10-12 03:38 PM




(big hugggssssssss) You never have to say goodbye, you just advance on and let the sun bask you rather than stare at you! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, swet Helen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

icebox
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3 posted 2003-10-12 04:41 PM


Your poem is excellent.

Ed has given you advice which is brilliant.


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4 posted 2003-10-12 04:55 PM


Helen, I also agree with Ed......
just flow with the source of electricity
and you can't lose.......

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (10-12-2003 04:56 PM).]

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5 posted 2003-10-12 04:58 PM


By the way, Gary and I call our letters and phone calls to each other while we are apart, our "doses of each other"...our Ethel and Gary medicine. LOL
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6 posted 2003-10-13 12:26 PM


H.... you're an amazing woman..
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7 posted 2003-10-13 11:44 AM


Electricity does indeed have its way with you, doesn't it?... Nicely penned, H..
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8 posted 2003-10-13 01:49 PM


sighs..
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