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Dream Away |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~*~*~ You were so quick short lived, a dream away from coming true. Shining starlight in my sky for a little while reigning from the clouds. A brief encounter exchanged for a smile easy on my heart. You painted a rainbow then turned down the sun and made me cry. Leaving me without warmth and still I dream, but you're not there. I had so much I wished to give instead it seems a lifetime searching for the words. Blinded by the glare streaking across the double pane revealing my despair. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Sorry for all my bluesy woozy poetry of late, I'll write pretty in pink next time. (maybe)  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Hey! We are all entitled to a day or two, or even three....where it just doesn't "feel" so cottonpickin' great inside.... Sendin' a hug your way.... Mag. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This is good... kind of abstract, which I like in poetry. You've used a lot of bright images and defaced them with action. I really like the turning down of the sun. Very imaginative shift into what became a poem of gloom in retrospect. A good poem... thank you for sharing it. Parasite Faith is a fine invention |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lori, I love your poetry, whether it's "bluesey woosey" or "pretty in pink". It all is written from your heart, and that's what matters, my friend. You keep on writing, and I'll keep on reading. Deal??  Heart hugs to you, sweet lady  Ethel |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
dont apologize its beautiful and its right from the heart of the moment |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very good expressions of poetry,,, |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Lori, you just write any old way you want. It's all beauty, though the sad ones do make me hurt right along with you. |
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allamericanjoe Member
since 2003-10-02
Posts 116Iredell county, NC |
Very pretty, sad little poem. I've been kinda "blusey" myself here lately. Don't sweat it! Love the poem! "The secret of life is enjoying the passage of time" ~James taylor~ |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
This one aches, so let's hope tomorrow holds a little more sunshine with maybe just a cloud or two to paint that rainbow on... [This message has been edited by Edder (10-12-2003 01:57 PM).] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lori, whether you right "bluesy" or "pretty in pink" you do it all so well, and straight from your heart. when I read one of your poems, I feel every line as though it is happening to me. you are brilliant! take care. Amy *hugs* "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is beautiful, dear Lori. The sadness and delusion is felt ... this is life and the poet needs to express everything ... I think no one is always on a high! Hugs. Margherita  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Bluesy~ Hope you are feeling better! Nicely written! Susan |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
BluesSerenade...This poem may be bluesy; but it has a blue beauty to it. I loved the way you wrote this. Spoke to my heart and soul of the loss behind the words. ***Ivy Rose |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Lori, this is sad but so beautifully colorful, sweet friend, I wish for all you find to come together then you can dream away the whole jigsaw! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, whether in blue or pretty in pink you write wonderfully, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
A poets truest beauty is to express the pain and the pleasure in equal clarity. Enjoyed this excellent write. TD |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice write |
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Amature2 Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 416 |
"You painted a rainbow then turned down the sun and made me cry." BluesSerenade, this is a heartfelt read, thank you for sharing. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You made me realize something when you were apologizing for your bluesy writes of late. Your writes, no matter whether they are blue or pink or orange, need no appologies ~ nor do mine! I was trying to excuse a poem that I had posted today as a "brain fart"! In effect I was appologizing for my ridiculous piece of writing! ~ but that was the place I was in when I wrote it! So be it! lol I felt this poem of yours. It makes me want to give you a great big comforting hug. ~ & btw, it's his loss! You are very special! ~ and you are a woman who is not only beautiful on the outside, but on the inside as well. In time, you'll learn to pick the ones worth having! Practice makes perfect! You are just working your way towards Mr. Right!  Thanks again for showing me that I should never appologize for my poetry! ~ and that goes for you as well, Dear Poetess! Loving, healing hugs, Linda |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
no girliegirl, write what u feeel, otherwise it wont ring true, your heart knows what it feels, as do i as i read the truth in your words.....pretty in pink will be here too, do it when u really feel it, makes it that much better............. hugs, to u girlie im doing a crying one myself coming up........ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I thought I'd replied to this... but I must have used disappearing ink. *S* Lady... write in whatever shades suit you at that moment... we will read. *S* That you grieve deeply simply means you love fully and without reservation... and I think that's the only kind of love worth giving. *S* Beautiful write. |
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ambrish Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 257India |
figureative and sad. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bluesy? if you ever apologize for writing again, that's it . . . I will just have to keep reading you  You painted a rainbow then turned down the sun and made me cry. God I adore this stanza . . . kinda like having your chair pulled out from under you Love you much Tweets xxoo |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
hugssssss lady blue.....  Lauren~ Will the wind ever remember the names |
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