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vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

0 posted 2003-10-11 06:39 PM

The clouds came by
The birds flew away
As the sun comes
Sun and I
Watching the rain
It's been a quite time
you haven't said a word
About tomorrow
you have cried all day
I tried to hold you
But you didn't let me
You didn't want to smile
Because you know
I will be gone
by tomorrow
Untill the rain stops
You want to say
But I guess
Your sorrow
and pain shows
In your eyes
You are trying not to cry
But your emotions shows
The darks clouds
rolls by
Amnd yet It is raining
My heart Is paining
When you are not saying
a word
You know
It Is all over between us
I will be gone
by tomorrow
Untill the rain stops

James_A_Fraser
Senior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

1 posted 2003-10-11 06:41 PM

Empathy is one of the highest human traits -- and you have an extra portion. I love this poem, and I find that I'm starting to look forward to all your work.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2003-10-11 06:43 PM

SweetVanDana~
This is beautifully sad, it's as though the rain is crying your tears~

Sending
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
noles1@totcon.com

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2003-10-11 06:47 PM

(big hugggssssssss) Oh Vandana, this is sad but beautiful, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and I wish for it to rain pearls and crystals for you, with tears of love! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vandana, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

4 posted 2003-10-11 06:59 PM

Vandana, lots of emotions expressed...You
are continuing to grow and doing nicely...

Good Job.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2003-10-11 07:06 PM

Vandana, this is very pretty, even if it is sad.
Thanks for sharing it with us.

Hugs

Ethel

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

6 posted 2003-10-11 07:35 PM

expressed well,,,
enjoyed,,,

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2003-10-11 10:16 PM

The finality is not easy to accept,
and I loved how you compared it to the rain.

Nothing lasts forever, including the heartache.

Nice writing vandana~

allamericanjoe
Member

since 2003-10-02

Posts 116
Iredell county, NC

8 posted 2003-10-11 10:59 PM

Nice! I like. Thank you for sharing it with us.

"The secret of life is enjoying the passage of time" ~James taylor~

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2003-10-12 10:13 PM

Nice writing...James

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

10 posted 2003-10-12 10:19 PM

Exsquisite in the ache...
Wonderfully written piece.
Hugs Vandana. TD

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