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Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-10-20 09:42 PM


halo lost in sands
that once stood as stone, i am
the bastard of faith




..and then one day you find..ten years have got behind you..no one told you when to run..you missed the starting gun..

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (10-20-2003 10:40 PM).]

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KoKo
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Inside the shadow's shadow
1 posted 2003-10-20 10:04 PM


Damn!
Had to think about this before I replied...You are amazing.

Martie
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2 posted 2003-10-20 10:05 PM


Raph

I prefer the give of sand, and as for faith...I'm working on faith in myself.  Perhaps one day after I'm gone, that will be written in stone?

Sorry, you made me think ...didn't mean to go meandering off into my own take on this.  I like your poem for that reason though.

Aenimal
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3 posted 2003-10-20 10:39 PM


thanks Koko appreciate it

Marite thinking's a good thing..i think..grins

pandonov
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b/w conscience and insolence
4 posted 2003-10-21 03:04 AM


if you fauth is as good as your poetry, u may consider a career as Pope. honestly this one is amazing...
John B
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5 posted 2003-10-21 03:25 AM


honesty and down to earth, i like your quick guidelines.

more signatures apear and truths are stuck behind sidelines...(as it appears)
in a period of disarray...(underscored with questions to existence)
we'll keep plugging and profile as much as possible each time we shock a face (and climb right back up the mountain no one wants to be witnessed climbing but does it anyway, much like the honest innocence submitting to these vains, we're happy to do this because when we wanted to be happy it's then we were saved.)

is honesty the reason we put our posture to distaste? sometimes. how to fix this? work out of oppression... preview your self for the world with others of your health... who knows...the light's on.. that i know. and halo's are before us.


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6 posted 2003-10-21 09:17 AM


Whoever said a boxer's jab wasn't subtle? Nice work here, Raph!

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Earth Angel
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7 posted 2003-10-21 09:25 AM



Martie beat me to that reply! Mind you, she probably expressed it better than I could! lol

~ Keep the faith!--If you can find it! Actually, I do believe you have it because  a write such as this had to have been written by someone who believes enough to question!


EA

vandana
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8 posted 2003-10-21 09:30 AM


enjoyed
gemjop
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9 posted 2003-10-21 05:44 PM


whoah!

love the sig too

Dark Angel
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10 posted 2003-10-22 05:55 PM


Wow Bello, Wow.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


Enchantress
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11 posted 2003-10-22 05:59 PM


WOW!!!

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

Aenimal
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12 posted 2003-10-22 11:09 PM


Thanks you very much everybody..bella, nice to see you back
passing shadows
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13 posted 2003-10-23 05:28 AM


I wonder sometimes in silence just how you do it
Fire Fairy
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14 posted 2003-10-23 06:01 AM


The still simplicity or your words are so luscious... how easy it is to feel hypocritical to belief or virtue. Your halo will shine once again... you have too much to give to this world.

Flower petal kisses on your eye lashes...


littlewing
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15 posted 2003-10-23 11:19 AM


ahh I like this:

and as your faith was corrupted
your Father melted as those sands  
(both of them even?)
*hugs*
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (10-23-2003 11:21 AM).]

Corinne
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16 posted 2003-10-23 01:20 PM


This is layered with meaning, Aenimal. Frightening clarity.


Core

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17 posted 2003-10-23 03:08 PM


Um, Raph? I love ya
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