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Holding the Moment
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Holding the Moment |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ Beneath the street lamp a white light glows illuminating the fog teaming in the shadows that seem less ordinary on a night like this. Settling in around me pinned between the seasons before the fall descends the days grow shorter still holding the moment in transition for hours, or however long it takes. The nights turn into days drifting in and out of thought anticipating raindrops defining the difference between my tears another passing fancy whistles in the wind. A cold chill slaps across my face rosy on my cheeks makes me come alive reminding me what is real allowing me to feel the way I used to feel about you. ~*~ |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Holding the moment can be good, just don't hold the bad ones too long.For your soul deserves to flourish in the beauty that is within the aquatic blue,mystcial serenade of your inner being.  Crystal |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
I sense impressionism here... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
The nights turn into days drifting in and out of thought anticipating raindrops defining the difference between my tears another passing fancy whistles in the wind. ******************************************* love this write, if not the inspirational experience |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
"A cold chill slaps across my face rosy on my cheeks makes me come alive reminding me what is real allowing me to feel the way I used to feel about you." a moment of revelation, me thinks...well done Bluesy gal! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Darn it, Blues...sometimes your poetry makes me wish I could play the violin..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Hold the moment, savor it... then exhale it slowly and wait for the next breath to be even better.. God I love the way you write Lori..... HUGS  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
bluesy... you do write it well.. always enjoy the read..always..... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"A cold chill slaps across my face rosy on my cheeks makes me come alive reminding me what is real allowing me to feel the way I used to feel about you." Excellent write Bluesy! Fantastic closing stanza. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
One could hardly read this and not be held in the moment, right there beside you Bluesy... Too bad that cold chill had to come by and ruin it... lol This read like a paragraph, out of a classic novel... “The Blue’s Serenade” I can’t wait to pick up the whole story someday, at Barnes & Noble! Richy |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Settling in around me pinned between the seasons before the fall descends the days grow shorter still holding the moment in transition for hours, or however long it takes. The nights turn into days drifting in and out of thought anticipating raindrops defining the difference between my tears another passing fancy whistles in the wind. ========================= I love the analogy, imagery and personifi in this Lori...tis a bittersweet beauty. I too am ready for a change of season...just not winter...I been frigid for long enough  "Nature's first green is gold, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lori, this poem was three-dimensional and chock full of energy. I really felt this--literally!   EA |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Crystal~ Thank you so much for your sweet and poetic reply. pandonov~ Thanks, I think. Kacy~ It happens that way, sorta like the proverbial tunnel? I sure do appreciate you. Edder~ A moment of revelation? Ah hah, you're so perceptive. Thanks so much. Oooooooo, you are so good to me! Huggin' ya Rat~ Hi Donna~ Thank you for all your good thoughts, made me tear up a bit, you did. Cpat~ Thanks, you flatter me ya know! Nancy~ I'm so glad you liked my ending, it was pretty much the essence of the entire poem. Many smiles across the miles. Richy~ It will never happen, but you sure know how to make me laugh! What a nice man you are, I thank you sincerely. Janet Marie~ Bittersweet is my middle name, close to it anyway! I don't know what to say, you are always so gracious with your replies, and I thank you once again for your kindness and understanding. Linda~ I guess this did head off in different directions, just goes to show my mind works in strange ways. Thank you sweetie~ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Lori, this is beautiful, sweet friend, you truly bring a glow to all the street lanterns and fireflies in your poetry, sweet friend, when you hold the moment you can enhance just about anything through your own intuition! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I enjoyed this read greatly. And I think you are very much alive in the moment, which is a precious gift, when you are fully aware of it. It contains all the possibilities, you have the choice. Beautiful. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a beautiful and a bit of a melancholic write Blues...the last line just made it awesome! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Bluesy~ Loved it woman! Nice job. Susan |
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