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On Evening's Film

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In contrast
Shadows deepen the line of your throat
And my words hang
Halfway in my own as I am unable
To utter these hard syllables
Against such a background
Of grey tones that paint you here
Half lit in evening
           With touches of last wave reflected sun
Cascading on the curve of your back
Then revealing a half turned smile
Of far off musing
                              Content perhaps
To ponder the ending day.

Color would not do you justice here
      For there is too much said in the form
Far more in the absence
                                         Detail begs
That would be refused to the eye
If the palette broadened to reds or blues

When you move
                            The curves of you
Bend the light and leave me in gasp
Of one more breath to inhale
All I see
                  And know all you donít say
Is in your own way being kind

Adams would approve
              This landscape

Yet I would capture it not as he
But instead
                    Hold it in my head
To develop later
                           In the dark of my heart

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1 posted 10-09-2003 02:56 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Ansel would approve of the poem, too...
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In contrast
Shadows deepen the line of your throat
And my words hang
Halfway in my own as I am unable
To utter these hard syllables
Against such a background
Of grey tones that paint you here
Half lit in evening
           With touches of last wave reflected sun
Cascading on the curve of your back
Then revealing a half turned smile
Of far off musing
                              Content perhaps
To ponder the ending day.

================================


*touching the screen*
good Lord I love your poetry.
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3 posted 10-09-2003 07:05 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

Sunshine... I doubt it..but thank you

Mothy one... ( touching screen) what poetry hun?    It's all a bar trick I told you...

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4 posted 10-09-2003 07:21 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Ron...I think you captured it perfectly!  
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5 posted 10-09-2003 07:23 PM       View Profile for Patricia   Email Patricia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Patricia

So good, Ron...I will be forever in awe of your work.  You know, everytime time I read you, I wonder...wonder how you do it so well every time, every word.  

Patricia
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6 posted 10-09-2003 07:25 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

you are one of the best, indeed...ya just need to worry less....

about other people I mean...

ugh...yanno what I mean..your a genius, lets put it that way

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

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7 posted 10-09-2003 07:32 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

Martie... thank you my friend.. but it is never perfect..only an illusion of passing.. and one in each telling becomes something slightly different..but then..it always is, filled with the subtle differences isn't it?

Patricia.. I actually grinned at your reply.. I thank you sincerely for the kind words.... but dear lady, I am not every word perfect every time.. all too aften I am juxtaposed on idea and actual words.. but am honored you would say such a nice thing..


Liz... come here you human! lol... ok...ok..all I was going to do was hug you for saying such nice things.... no need to throw that koolaid at me..
genius...no... but thank you dear for saying nice things...
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"        With touches of last wave reflected sun
Cascading on the curve of your back
Then revealing a half turned smile
Of far off musing
                              Content perhaps
To ponder the ending day."

Tell JM to move over...
this moth wants her hands
on the screen
as well.

Damn!

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

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9 posted 10-09-2003 09:48 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

Damn, do I understand this...
Almost made me swallow, hard...but I caught myself.  I'm so good at that.  
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10 posted 10-09-2003 09:54 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Greeneyes

you leave me speechless each time, if this is a bar trick, can I start a tab? WOW hon...hugsss you
Lauren~

There's a song inside  my soul
One that I've tried to write over and over again

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11 posted 04-20-2004 04:13 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Oh yesssssss... this one..........

bar trick huh? ... OK...
Bartender...another round please.
 
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