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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-10-09 02:42 PM



Out-lined

outside you
you had
drawn a line
stopped dead
evidence that
there had
once been
living within
a circle
now just
walls thick
of salt
meant to melt
when touched
by the travel
of snail silk
don’t worry
it is
such a crime
but I
won’t cross it


© Copyright 2003 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
icebox
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since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383
in the shadows
1 posted 2003-10-09 02:48 PM


Sad, but well done.

Thank you for sharing it.

Endlessecho
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since 2003-09-05
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I live within myself
2 posted 2003-10-09 03:10 PM


understood this in, maybe not the way you meant it, but my own way.  Very personal and very real.  Thank you.
pandonov
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since 2003-10-03
Posts 478
b/w conscience and insolence
3 posted 2003-10-09 03:37 PM


beautiful title, and the poem, too
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Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass
4 posted 2003-10-10 09:06 AM


Sometimes I read a poem and wish I didn't understand it. This is one of them.

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alisa
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5 posted 2003-10-10 01:15 PM


i am speechless.

last night i felt this had a different meaning, today i feel another meaning. thats what i love about your work...

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
6 posted 2003-10-10 04:28 PM


it's sort of like spiting themselves...

I like your style
M

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7 posted 2003-10-10 10:08 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Such heart and soul fills this, sweet friend, I hope all is well and you sure embroidered this in frame, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
8 posted 2003-10-10 10:27 PM


amazing red
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