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Jason Lyle
Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438
With my darkling

0 posted 2003-10-09 12:12 PM


As you would know
by now my vice
is not this shot
I slam like ice

a moments breath
will hold the tale
a man who drowned
in fairytales

my one true vice
as many know
is loving things
when God said no

so punish me
for I was wrong
or so said God
I heard your song

I heard your song...

[This message has been edited by Jason Lyle (10-09-2003 12:24 PM).]

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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175
VA
1 posted 2003-10-09 12:15 PM


I've drowned in faerie tales too...*sigh*

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Cpat Hair
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Member Patricius
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

2 posted 2003-10-09 12:17 PM


ah.. Jason...to love what is not to be, and to drown in what could be..I think I understand..maybe too well.


BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
3 posted 2003-10-09 12:40 PM


a moments breath
will hold the tale
a man who drowned
in fairytales

I've heard that song before~

Yes, it's a vice that's  hard to shake!
Could be worse, then again it could be
alot of things.  

Wonderful writing Jason~



dertah
Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

4 posted 2003-10-09 12:58 PM


yes, very familiar, drowning in fairytales.  im still drowning in fact, or am i?
Gina Culliney
Member
since 2003-03-08
Posts 170

5 posted 2003-10-13 11:40 PM


A well penned piece, deserving of praise.
Aenimal
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
6 posted 2003-10-13 11:44 PM


I know this you write it well
inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
7 posted 2003-10-14 06:46 AM


my one true vice
as many know
is loving things
when God said no

and why do you think that is?
if he said yes, youd be bored too fast probably , right?

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