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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2003-10-09 11:55 AM



This thread
that looks frayed
                 dangles
at
the

edge
        [..........]

in hem of raw
        un
finished cloth
                we wove
on a loom of words
with tightly spun
                 believe
the
T
H
R
E
A
D

that looks frayed now
and dangles

Begging
               come undone

What camel passed through
the needles eye?

For I am still
      in want of you

forever in the need
to dream
                      it might
be so

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Ceinwyn
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1 posted 2003-10-09 11:58 AM


For I am still
      in want of you

yeah pretty much....

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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2 posted 2003-10-09 11:59 AM


come here and hug me girl... you may not be in want of me....but hey..I'll take a hug anytime..
Ceinwyn
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3 posted 2003-10-09 12:00 PM


lol no no my reply was totally misconstruded right??!! I was having a moment with that line..I was thinking of something I'm flustered right now lol

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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4 posted 2003-10-09 12:01 PM


LMAO....

oh?? you mean yu aren't inwant of me??? oh NO!!!!

now I am crushed......

( walks off sobbing...)



Jason Lyle
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5 posted 2003-10-09 12:04 PM


Loved the words I read in this...thread.



Jason

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6 posted 2003-10-09 12:13 PM


tattered thoughts
frayed hems
a needle
that could bring
the weft
to the woof...

a gentle weave, m'friend...

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7 posted 2003-10-09 12:16 PM


Thank you Jason...

Sunshine...
gentle weave? or just a loose thread begging pulled?

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8 posted 2003-10-09 12:16 PM


in hem of raw
        un
finished cloth
                we wove
on a loom of words
with tightly spun
                 believe

Love how your mind works Cpat, Ron~
OH yes!!



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9 posted 2003-10-09 12:18 PM


Blues... my mind works??????? OH lordy..I thought that had stopped eons ago...


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10 posted 2003-10-09 12:25 PM


Keeping it from coming updone. It takes constant work. Words and poetry help.  

Beautifully written.  

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11 posted 2003-10-09 12:26 PM


endlessecho...thank you for the words..and taking time to read.. both are appreciated.


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12 posted 2003-10-09 12:33 PM


Gee...how my mind works when I read you.
Wonderful piece here Ron..love the presentation as well.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

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13 posted 2003-10-09 02:12 PM


Thank you Nancy... glad you enjoyed..


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14 posted 2003-10-09 04:25 PM


What camel passed through
the needles eye?

.....

you don't mean the cigarettes, do you?

......

jokes apart...

this is a fascinating write, my friend

regards
sudhir

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15 posted 2003-10-09 04:29 PM


lol... no, I gave up Camels some time back and switched to something milder...

although.... smoke through the eye of a needle is an interesting image to build on...
hmmmm.......


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16 posted 2003-10-09 04:30 PM


I love the way you wrote this Capt. Ron...
with your thread dangling...LOL  

Hugs  
Ethel

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17 posted 2003-10-09 04:31 PM


lo... now ethel..you'll make me blush!!!

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Susan Caldwell
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18 posted 2003-10-09 04:45 PM


Very interesting piece...makes my mind wander...

and that is just not a safe thing.



Susan

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19 posted 2003-10-09 06:04 PM


Very clever formatting, Ron!

Hope all is well.


Corinne

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20 posted 2003-10-09 06:07 PM


No one does it like you, Capt!
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21 posted 2003-10-09 06:18 PM


To tug the loose thread and come undone at the seam or leave it to chance, perchance to dream?

Hmmm...you made me think about things left undone...better left undone, me thinks!

Hey bud, you know you make me think even when my brain hurts.

Patricia

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22 posted 2003-10-09 10:12 PM


LOL @ Patricia...he has a way of doing that, even when it hurts.
I'm not thinking and you can't make me!!  

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23 posted 2003-10-09 10:54 PM


For I am still
      in want of you

forever in the need
to dream
                      it might
be so


~Sigh~   WOW...


Lauren~

There's a song inside  my soul
One that I've tried to write over and over again

pandonov
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24 posted 2003-10-09 11:42 PM


do you read language poetry. kinda reminds me of it. enjoyed it
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25 posted 2003-10-10 12:15 PM


I knew I needed another sewing class.
I'm nearly threadbare. Any suggestions?
Are dangling threads and needles anything like dangling participles????

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