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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2003-10-09 05:15 AM


I try to let
these thoughts
roll off my shoulders
but...
they keep
on creeping up on me
when you
ramble nonsense
in my ear
3 in the morning
I'm just a silly girl
hungry for attention
or atleast
that's what
I try to
convince myself...
someone must think
it quite amusing
actually
yeah, really
I'm laughing
ha.. ha.. ha..
so amusing that
you know
that
proverbial
rock and a hard place
yeah well
I stubbed more than my
big toe...



If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

© Copyright 2003 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
dingusjr
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1 posted 2003-10-09 06:25 AM


Nice...you have a voice, and I hear it!     Larry
Sunshine
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2 posted 2003-10-09 09:22 AM


I have been told that my poetry
is silliness, and that I just want
attention...

but dear Ceinwyn, we both know,
don't we,
that's not it at all...

you keep sharing.

I'll keep reading.


Ceinwyn
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3 posted 2003-10-09 09:26 AM


awwwwwwww yes that's not it at all..see you know thanks for being so sweet..& thanks Larry I have a voice ironic tho I lost it this morning silly cold

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

angelblueyes
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4 posted 2003-10-09 10:05 AM


Your attempts are always wonderful and it's my opinion that all your writes are real poems You are talented, tenderhearted, and filled with such a wondrous spirit that it's amazing to see.Keep on writing and let that talent flourish so that you can share it with all.
Crystal

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5 posted 2003-10-09 10:30 AM


Kris, you're adorable!


Linda

arthur
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6 posted 2003-10-09 10:53 AM


not to worry-you will recover
arthur

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7 posted 2003-10-09 01:55 PM


Awww...

Cool words.

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8 posted 2003-10-09 02:20 PM


Kris, I feel that you're talking about
more in this poem, than just about
writing...aren't you? Keep writing, sweetie.  

By the way, I hope that your cold gets better.
Hugs  
Ethel

Ceinwyn
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9 posted 2003-10-09 02:23 PM


thanks guys...

Linda nei you're the one that's adorable

And sweet Ethel thanks yeah pretty much you got me figured out

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

pandonov
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10 posted 2003-10-09 03:28 PM


cute, really cute
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11 posted 2003-10-11 07:09 PM




(smiles) Oh Kristen, your poems are always wonderful and special to us, sweet friend, I too always feel silly when writing much of my work but I believe poetry is meant to feel silly all the time and I love what your heart expresses! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kristen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

James_A_Fraser
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12 posted 2003-10-11 07:11 PM


Yes! The very last poem I posted was scribbled in the dark, on a little pad I keep to towel-up such things when I start drooling them in the wee hours..... boy does this one sing to me!



~~J

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13 posted 2003-10-11 08:01 PM


I really like what you write. I don't always respond as typing is sometimes difficult for me. However, you are a 'real poet who writes real poems.'

You keep writing .... huggles, Marti

Hear Blessings dropping their blossoms all around you.

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14 posted 2003-10-12 05:20 PM


I like this write very much. *S* And if our poems are cries for attention... well... don't we all need some now and then? *S*
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