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Jordyn05
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since 2003-07-17
Posts 62


0 posted 2003-10-08 05:23 PM


Hi,

I have wrote this poem and I need help big time!
I need someone to help me put the poem into paragragh forum and it has to make since. I want to enter this poem in a contest at  my school but the rules say that the work has to be in paraghs. Please help me out. If you want to email me your ideas ect. You can email me at immierules2005@yahoo.com Please put in a subject or I'll delete it. You can also  post your ideas on the website too.

Special Eduaction2
Who are you to look at me, and try to tell me what I can be?
Listen up all you people who have disliked me for who I am.
I can do as well as anyone in school.
For years people have said that I don’t have the skills.
Or that I can’t deserve to enjoy life’s thrills, twists, turns, and hills.
All I want you to do is just to listen to me.
I will probably surprise you just wait and see.
They thought that I wouldn’t speak and reach life’s highest peak.
Take a minute to look and see. I did it all.
It took me a while to be on the ball.
Yes I can have it all.
I can fly like a bird and soar in the sky.
You don’t have to guess why.
Anyone with determination and a loving heart.
Can go through and conquer math, science and art.
A person can only do what they set their mind to.
I am intending to be a success.
I have no doubt with nonetheless.
Don’t look at me and try to tell me what I ought to be.
I know what I can be and do.
I am proud to be me.
Look out world hear I come.
I am number one.
Yes I do believe not because of you but because I have power to be what I can be.
I can do anything that I set my mind you.
I don’t want to be you.
I don’t want people to ask why are you so blue?
Is it because you lost your shoe?
I am loosing track.
I am getting caught in the act.
I am back and ready for action.
I am waiting to show the world.
That people with disabilities.
Are no fools because we go to special schools.
We are able to all the things that you do.
Don’t judge us behind our backs.
We are not a laugh track.
We want to be friends with you.
Because special kids need friends just like you.
Don’t be afraid to come up and talk with us.
We aren’t that different from you.
You do know that it’s true.
That we can learn from you and you can learn from us.
So come on and sit with us on the bus.
If you don’t you’ve be sorry.
Because we are hear for a reason.
We have lessons to learn form others.
You can learn from us too.
So sit down and stay a while.
We will be here for a long time.
We have a special message to share.
We are needed to tell other about us.
Then the world will start to accept us.
When that happens we can be friends with people from around the world.
You can do anything that you want to.
All you have to do is be you.
I can do it and have it all.
I am on top on the ball.
No I’m not a wound up doll.
Who looks so small?
And that people say that I won’t ever be tall at all.
I can do that.
Oh yes I can.
Don’t tell me what I am to be in the “REAL world.
When you don’t even know me.
Why are you trying to judge me then?
It doesn’t make any since.
Then why do you judge me the way that you do.
When you haven’t ever been in my shoes.
I dare you to try to take 24 hrs of your time and be I & I’ll be you.
I am the person who gets picked on each day.
Not knowing what to say.
When you grab me by me shirt.
And call me names like I’m dirt.
I am the autistic boy.
I can see the things that you see.
But I see them in a different light.
Oh, no not another fight.
My fingers are dancing on the keys.
Turning in whichever way I please.
Try to live a day in my shoes and see the world as I do.
It is a cold cruel world out there.
Yes it is. Don’t tell me that it’s not.
I know from YEARS of torment and pain that the world that we live in,
Is not such a pretty place?
In which we can show our face.
And not be in a disgrace in the whole human race when you are sent here for a reason.
We are just like you. We like to do the things you do.
Even through we are different.
We are the future.
It is up to us to see that this world is a better place for those who come after.
Espicallly those with austism.
© 2003




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PsychoticBunni
Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 162
Mythical Atlantis
1 posted 2003-10-08 05:44 PM


wow. it speaks to me. i know a kid w/ autism from my skool and he is really awesome and deep, so i understand...sort of. try to space it into paragraphs with four lines each a little longer if necessary

Meg-cheauvanistsshould be tortured mercilessly by being tied to a mast and listening to Sirens singing their sexual song

Richy
Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050

2 posted 2003-10-08 07:28 PM




Dear Jordyn05, although you may need a little assistance putting your poem into paragraph form.
One thing you absolutely don’t need any assistance in, is helping this wonderful poem of yours make sense!

It stands on it’s own, as a call for compassion, and tolerance, for sensitivity, and kindness. And for the desire to simply matter, and make a difference in this world.

As well as for the will to be heard...

Simply, many of the best attributes that the human spirit has to offer...

I think what you have accomplished here, is what poetry is all about.

The imaginative expression of ones’ own experience, and heartfelt feelings. In order to create an emotional awareness, through meaning, sound, and rhythm...

And I think you’ve done it very well!

I’ve attempted below, to break your poem down into smaller bite sized chunks...

I hope it is of some assistance.

If you ever need any further help, please feel free to email me anytime.

Blessings to you Jordyn,


Take Great Care,

And please, don‘t ever lose your wonderful spirit!


Richy
Special Eduaction2


Who are you to look at me,
and try to tell me what I can be?
Listen up all you people
who have disliked me for who I am.

I can do as well as anyone in school.
For years people have said
that I don’t have the skills.
Or that I can’t deserve to enjoy
life’s thrills, twists, turns, and hills.

All I want you to do is just to listen to me.
I will probably surprise you just wait and see.

They thought that I wouldn’t speak
and reach life’s highest peak.
Take a minute to look and see.
I did it all.
It took me a while to be on the ball.
Yes I can have it all.

I can fly like a bird and soar in the sky.
You don’t have to guess why.
Anyone with determination and a loving heart.
Can go through and conquer math, science and art.

A person can only do what they set their mind to.
I am intending to be a success.
I have no doubt with nonetheless.

Don’t look at me and try to tell me
what I ought to be.
I know what I can be and do.
I am proud to be me.
Look out world hear I come.
I am number one.

Yes I do believe not because of you
but because I have power to be what I can be.
I can do anything that I set my mind you.
I don’t want to be you.
I don’t want people to ask why are you so blue?
Is it because you lost your shoe?

I am loosing track.
I am getting caught in the act.
I am back and ready for action.

I am waiting to show the world.
That people with disabilities.
Are no fools because we go to special schools.

We are able to all the things that you do.
Don’t judge us behind our backs.
We are not a laugh track.
We want to be friends with you.

Because special kids need friends just like you.
Don’t be afraid to come up and talk with us.
We aren’t that different from you.
You do know that it’s true.
That we can learn from you and you can learn from us.
So come on and sit with us on the bus.

If you don’t you’ll be sorry.
Because we are here for a reason.
We have lessons to learn form others.
You can learn from us too.

So sit down and stay a while.
We will be here for a long time.
We have a special message to share.
We are needed to tell others about us.
Then the world will start to accept us.

When that happens we can be friends
with people from around the world.
You can do anything that you want to.
All you have to do is be you.

I can do it and have it all.
I am on top on the ball.
No I’m not a wound up doll.
Who looks so small?
And that people say
that I won’t ever be tall at all.

I can do that.
Oh yes I can.
Don’t tell me what I am to be,
in the “REAL world.
When you don’t even know me.
Why are you trying to judge me then?
It doesn’t make any sense
.
Then why do you judge me the way that you do.?
When you haven’t ever been in my shoes?
I dare you to try to take 24 hrs of your time
and be I & I’ll be you.

I am the person who gets picked on each day.
Not knowing what to say.
When you grab me by my shirt.
And call me names like I’m dirt.

I am the autistic boy.
I can see the things that you see.
But I see them in a different light.
Oh, no not another fight.

My fingers are dancing on the keys.
Turning in whichever way I please.
Try to live a day in my shoes
and see the world as I do.

It is a cold cruel world out there.
Yes it is. Don’t tell me that it’s not.
I know from YEARS of torment and pain
that the world that we live in,
Is not such a pretty place?
In which we can show our face.
And not be in a disgrace, in the whole human race
when you are sent here for a reason.

We are just like you.
We like to do the things you do.
Even through we are different.
We are the future.
It is up to us to see that this world is a better place
for those who come after.

Especially those with autism.



[This message has been edited by Richy (10-08-2003 07:35 PM).]

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
3 posted 2003-10-08 08:00 PM


I am all choked up with the beauty of your bright spirit which shines through your wonderful poem. You have heart and soul and have expressed yourself very well.

Richy is a sweetheart and I love his reply to you and the help that he has so generously offered. Your poem is a remarkable example of the what we can do when we believe in ourselves.

Yeppers! You're special!

Loving hugs and a great big smile,
Earth Angel

Jordyn05
Member
since 2003-07-17
Posts 62

4 posted 2003-10-13 04:27 PM


Hi,

Thanks for your response Earth Angel.
It means so much to me when I get responses from people who like my poems.


Jenn

jbouder
Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534
Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash
5 posted 2003-10-27 02:54 PM


Jordyn:

Thanks for writing this.  It was touching.  Also, please know that you are not alone in trying to make this world a better place for people with autism.

Jim

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