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To one frail |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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"I'm destruction, but lovingly" she teased, yet her eyes tasted no humor -- only the clutter of too much thought. What could I say to that? This poem, in loose rhyme and more syllables than necessary, is the best I could offer up in response. She took one look at the line the letters made. "Like a river," she cooed, before stretching on the bed. The poem fell, single-paged, to the floor. The windows, too, seemed to cascade. [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (10-07-2003 07:11 PM).] |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Like, woah.. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I know.  I'm feeling .... not sure .... right now. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jeez, keep em coming Mike, I'm loving them all. keeping this too. Maree  fate is not just |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
..... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (10-07-2003 07:28 PM).] |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
oh..am.um...bleh... then there was silence...... And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(laughing at Liz) love it when she is speachless..you never know if it is because she didn't like it, or was just blown away by it.... me personally... I think it exhibits those qualities we discussed earlier...  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Mike, you've out-done yourself with this one! I truly loved it! The narrative style, the imagery, the pulling in of the reader and saying, "See what I see! Feel what I feel!"...   Linda |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Nice Mike, really nice.... I enjoyed reading. Thanks, coyote "Who knows if to live is to be dead, and to be dead, to live? And we really, it may be, are dead; in fact I once heard sages say that we are now dead, |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, all. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
this is a pretty poem...this needs to be seen AGAIN ..sooo breeeeeeaaathhheee If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Letting out a deep breath  Wonderfully done.Crystal |
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