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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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Counting every drop of air, swallowed partially and spit away, I think we are tired from too much sleep, or perhaps from spinning for too long. lets join hands now: A human sphere that smears and smears and fades away I am a totally separate piece, photosphere comes through in grey mixed with grey… We are a new race- half human, and half bird no feathers, no eyes JUST a pretty piece of glass cutting through the atmosphere here’s to slowly standing up, here’s to pushing us to the ground here is to the wordless song: I drown every day. this is for tasting sour air, this is for Fridays and Mondays, for Saturdays and Sundays. This is for rectangles, triangles, circles and squares: the shapes we use to distort our vision twists and twists till’ there’s no more: motion sickness wins the war And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
*collapses* |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
*collapses along with M* |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Absolutely wonderful! Maree  fate is not just |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
oh god! wake up wake up!!!!  and so young...And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
ok is is just me or do my eyes look demented in that picture? And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Is it just me, or did you give them a picture where the resolution is too low, and therefore you're a pixellated human? |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
it said it was too high so i um...lowered it  sigh.... oh well....I'll pretend it makes me mysterious And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
LOl.. wait..I think I'm smeared with words... interesting work... Liz... would think you had too much red koolaid and were on a sugar high, if hadn't been so good...  and the picture... kind of makes you look...( oh gasp!) human!!!! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I'll tell raphael that you stole his lines. lol...kids on red koodlaid...our next album And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Excellent work, Wind. Your mind intrigues me.... coyote "Who knows if to live is to be dead, and to be dead, to live? And we really, it may be, are dead; in fact I once heard sages say that we are now dead, |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Wonderful Wind. This is a fine piece of writing. The best I have read this morning. As for the picture I thought it was okay. The old one was fuzzy...this one seems a little sharper. At least you can see the shape of the face now. Wish I could write like you girl. Keep it up! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
ahem...I am the one that brought up red koolaid first!!! (go check the liv thread..ah..when its back) Liz~The words are wonderful... The picture is great!  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
spinning with amazement. Cool eyes, maybe kool aid eyes. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
This just goes to show that you ARE TOO! (think about it) [This message has been edited by Edder (10-08-2003 12:47 PM).] |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
honest, u say. hm I don't know. there is something in this poem I like, but don't know what is it. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Liz, you look hauntingly beautiful in your photo. Fine features and incredible depth in your eyes--or are they just out of focus? lol Your poem is a trip and a half!   Linda |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I think we are tired from too much sleep, or perhaps from spinning for too long. Liz, I love this poem...even if I did get dizzy reading it. ahahahaha!! Seriously, my litlle friend, I sure did miss you while we were gone, though I did see you over yonder yesterday. I would have e-mailed you, but couldn't find your address. Oh, this picture is really pretty. You already know that, don't you? LOL Seriously, it's really good, Liz. It's a lot better than the others you had on here. You look older in this one than you did the others. I hope that's good to hear. LOL Love ya, my friend  Hugs Ethel |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
lets join hands now: A human sphere that smears and smears and fades away I am a totally separate piece, photosphere comes through in grey mixed with grey… WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE Goosebumps. It read like a song. when do i get to grow up and write like you? Your pic! ahhh you pretty thing! love ya gal, cool background thingummy, you're quite an artist aint ya? me jealous of you? nooooo. (yes) ~I wanna live, I wanna give, I've been a miner for a heart of gold~ Neil Young |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
SMEARED ... cool write and the thought of pixalleted human is great too... regards sudhir |
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PsychoticBunni Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 162Mythical Atlantis |
dude liz i hate u now. u write sooooo good. i can't even understand it. but u do look kinda p.o.ed in that pic lol Meg-cheauvanistsshould be tortured mercilessly by being tied to a mast and listening to Sirens singing their sexual song |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
ack...megan... what have I done to myself hahahahaha what kind of name is that anyways? And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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PsychoticBunni Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 162Mythical Atlantis |
what MEAGHAN or psychoticbunni? i like both. but the psychoticbunni thing is from a fanfic i wrote once. and the monty python and the sarch for the holy grail movie. lol. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Hey Kiddo!! Now this...is what I missed! (Susan's right, it was her line originally. Now calm down Myrtle, it's just red Kool-aid) Cool pic btw...pixilooped or not. |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Plop!!!!Yep yep you've spinned it well.  Crystal |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
yea and gem the backround is the inside of a computer...cmon...yanno that just like me. And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
pretty picture liz....awesome!!!! i love the poem the message for critiques! most awesome! ri * the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes * |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
thanks ri and everyone else... What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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