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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-10-03 03:35 AM



I
want to rise
with
the steam
of a hot
bath,
it makes
me forget
about
you.

© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
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1 posted 2003-10-03 05:55 AM


Hmmm, I like...very much.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


dingusjr
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2 posted 2003-10-03 06:14 AM


quiet and peacefull...and sad...all at the same time.   Thanks,  Larry
LeeJ
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3 posted 2003-10-03 07:29 AM


well, quite consuming and very resourceful...stimulating the mind...good one
and good morning

littlewing
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4 posted 2003-10-03 08:23 AM


Meg, this is beautiful
God, you know it is in the bath
I do my remembering and forgetting

You have described this perfectly
yes, rise and dissipate . . .
leave me be . . .
Beautiful writing
truly
I adore this
xxoo

Toerag
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5 posted 2003-10-03 09:02 AM


I'd love to be your bath....I envy the water's ability to touch you totally.
inkedgoddess
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6 posted 2003-10-03 09:04 AM



I
want to rise
with
the steam
of a hot
bath,
it makes
me forget
about
you.

no that would make me want him to jump back in with me into the steam of desire....

Earth Angel
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7 posted 2003-10-03 09:15 AM


Kaoru, I too have had moments like that. You described it simply--but ever so aptly...


EA

Susan Caldwell
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8 posted 2003-10-03 11:07 AM


Meg~

A bath can be so soothing...

(and lock the door next time, I think Toe might try to get in)

Susan

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9 posted 2003-10-03 12:15 PM


Perfect.
passing shadows
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10 posted 2003-10-03 12:19 PM


yep...sometimes that works
Mistletoe Angel
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11 posted 2003-10-03 11:10 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Meghan, I can feel some tears deep in this, sweet friend, sometimes we just have to let it all evaporate because it hurts to just be left as a handprint on a steamed mirror! (sad sigh) I send angel hugs your way, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Meghan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Amature2
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12 posted 2003-10-29 05:26 PM


Kaoru,this sounds so relaxing. Thank You for sharing.

B T W, it goes with Serenity's challenge too.

vandana
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13 posted 2003-10-29 05:34 PM


enjoyed
Krawdad
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14 posted 2003-10-29 05:34 PM


Yup, self indulgence will do that, and how better than a steamy soothe.

I see that you do shorter poems well, too.

Earth Angel
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15 posted 2003-10-29 07:07 PM


Oooo! ~ and what a pleasant way to do it!


EA

1slick_lady
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16 posted 2003-10-29 07:12 PM


do i tell you enough that i love how you write?
Aenimal
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17 posted 2003-10-29 08:40 PM


perfect

#okay so Mike took my perfect..thanks mike..how about flawless then

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (10-29-2003 08:43 PM).]

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