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gemjop
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0 posted 2003-10-02 09:27 AM


Pale faced enemy

strikes a chord in reflections of answers

YOU ARE

my trouble

AND
I
STARE
BACK

I still look like child
made up lashes wiped off

like this

deciding without the help
of easy spotted white and black ones

is playground bully

whichever colour truth you told
made it easy to be lied to

This room has never been

SO
TIDY

I miss making a mess
with you

out of our lives

LIFE HAS NEVER BEEN SO TIDY

you call

and
I don't hear
the ring

Walking merry go round the exposed roots
of parental like tree

FOR SO MANY HOURS

fingered smooth worn bark
with dirty fingernails
and clean heart

I would spiral and hover
like child for your attention

IN VAIN

Always different in age
despite same living years

hidden in arms of fallen leaves
so i din't have to pretend to want to play

such tired attempts at cartwheels stung eyes
and looking back

I should have told myself not to bother

I TRIED

But never could throw myself in circles

Now I manage just fine.


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Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2003-10-02 09:44 AM


Gemma... you did good



like this..for what it says and what it implies... you captured it well and I had to read this three times..just to savor what I saw in it..



nakdthoughts
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2 posted 2003-10-02 09:55 AM


Like Ron I had to go 'round more than once...and saw myself at times.

Good vent, Gemma

hugsss
M

gemjop
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3 posted 2003-10-02 10:02 AM


Thanks you two, It may not make much sense to anyone else but me, because it contains so many memories, and they are quite dis jointed and randomly placed i suppose. it makes it all kind of hard to follow.

but the main theme, I am my own pale faced enemy who seemed to have more sense as a child.

~I wanna live, I wanna give, I've been a miner for a heart of gold~  Neil Young

Ericc
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4 posted 2003-10-02 10:20 AM


Dear Gem...your words speak beyond logic...to the heart, the soul, the shared experince of life.
They always touch.

Eric

Aenimal
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5 posted 2003-10-02 02:05 PM


children do have more sense, adults are convoluted

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (10-02-2003 02:06 PM).]

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6 posted 2003-10-02 02:17 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Gemma, I understand this ever so well, dearest friend, I believe memories always get discombobulated and ever so often I believe children make more sense than adults, as adults are so much more naive and foolish! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Gemma, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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7 posted 2003-10-03 12:43 PM


How's this for strange? When I started reading, I had Pink Floyd's Any Colour You Like in my head. As I finished, the song had transmuted into Skinny Puppy's Love in Vein.

Harrowing angst. Fortunately, that's what's I loves.

passing shadows
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8 posted 2003-10-03 12:48 PM


there's only so much one can take, isn't there?
n2dmystic
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9 posted 2003-10-03 12:54 PM


hope happens, life is ahead.  very nice write.

Peace, Joe
in the big MT
seeking the serendipitous magical mysteries of life's ubiquitous twisteries

Kaoru
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10 posted 2003-10-03 02:26 PM


DAMN Gem...
pandonov
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11 posted 2003-10-03 02:40 PM


quite beautiful, painfully beautiful
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