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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175
VA

0 posted 2003-10-01 01:14 PM



something
just
isn't
setting
right

as
we
both
lie
here
connecting
the
dots

i
must
have
tripped
over
your
thoughts

as
you
trace
my
feelings
with
the
tips
of
your
fingers

something
just
isn't
setting
right

as
we
both
lie
here
awake
holding
onto
the
space
between


something
must
be
wrong

...i love you...

almost
replaced

...goodnight...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

© Copyright 2003 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
n2dmystic
Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 253
beyond the doors of perception
1 posted 2003-10-01 01:17 PM


this is beautiful!  I pray you bridge the gap between good night and...

Peace, Joe
in the big MT
seeking the serendipitous magical mysteries of life's ubiquitous twisteries

SharaRose
Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~
2 posted 2003-10-01 01:20 PM


Isn't that funny not long ago I called myself Spacesbtween at a website. I know this feeling...like something is missing..somethings just not right. Thank you for sharing this, because now I know I'm not the only person that feels this kind of thing. Awesome to not feel so alone.
Love,
Terri~

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Mistletoe Angel
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since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816
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3 posted 2003-10-01 01:30 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Kristen, this is wonderful, sweet friend, take caution and follow your heart and hear what you want to hear as there is quite a distinguishment between the two lines! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is very touching, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kristen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

J. K. Mitchell
Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 311
GA
4 posted 2003-10-01 02:46 PM


I like this.
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
5 posted 2003-10-01 05:03 PM


"I must have tripped over your thoughts" this is a cool, cool line.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
6 posted 2003-10-01 05:15 PM


*smile*
Kris . . .
loved the ending
sometimes you never do know

Beautiful writing
here:

...i love you...

almost
replaced

...goodnight...


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