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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2003-10-01 12:18 PM



How many hours of insomnia
could fit on the head of a pin?

And how many of those pins
could be formed into costume jewelry?

This piece, here,
with help of time,
was given to me by distance.

This smart bracelet,
glittering like keys,
reminds me of past travels.

And this drop-locket
clasped at my throat
can never be opened.

What do you want?
It's only pins.
Grooved and smoothed
into shape.

A ghost I know
that stays and stays,
and haunts the panes,
made it for me.

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-10-01 12:21 PM


I have a ghost too


n2dmystic
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2 posted 2003-10-01 12:26 PM



I like this muchly, though I am very concrete, thus a lot of abstractions elude me.  But I must comment, as I am sometimes shackled by jewels made by the "Ghost."  thank you

Peace, Joe
in the big MT
seeking the serendipitous magical mysteries of life's ubiquitous twisteries

Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
3 posted 2003-10-01 12:30 PM


Gah, I'm all.. flustered and stuff now.
Ceinwyn
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4 posted 2003-10-01 12:39 PM


I'm always in awe....

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn
5 posted 2003-10-01 12:45 PM


You've a great mind squirrel dude.


Nice jewelry

gemjop
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6 posted 2003-10-01 12:52 PM


And this drop-locket
clasped at my throat
can never be opened.

This means more than even your words can say. Or have they just said it already?

flustered too...aaargh

take a bow, this is a diamond

~I wanna live, I wanna give, I've been a miner for a heart of gold~  Neil Young

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just out of reach
7 posted 2003-10-01 01:57 PM


And this drop-locket
clasped at my throat
can never be opened

Simply Awesome!!  Chris

Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore



    

bsquirrel
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8 posted 2003-10-01 05:31 PM


Thanks. September was quite the month. May it rest in pieces.
Dark Angel
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9 posted 2003-10-01 05:48 PM


I'm with Wranx...you've a great mind indeed.

Love this.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


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10 posted 2003-10-01 06:01 PM


damn those ghosts.

but then again...

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

bsquirrel
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11 posted 2003-10-02 05:51 PM


Much thanks.
littlewing
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12 posted 2003-10-02 08:23 PM


Mikey
ahhh you do speak the truth
made for me . . .
indeed . . .
that mind of yours . . .
amazing
xxoo

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In Your Poetic Mind
13 posted 2003-10-02 08:36 PM


you are indeed a poet.....exceptional, and I love the title!


Lauren~

The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you

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