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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-09-30 10:04 AM



One Last One


I’ll go on
now as if
nothing ever
really changed
but we both
know it did
the secrets
that we shared
with no one
hiding the stains
where tears fell
on silk and
the damn weather
crawling in
promising to
bring yellow
but that too
didn’t matter
I wouldn’t be
able to see it
across the grey

"wish your room had room for two" John Mayer

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1 posted 2003-09-30 11:15 AM


Melancholy, wistful write Helen...
well done!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~


~ I love your glances meeting mine
     across forever or the room ~

James_A_Fraser
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2 posted 2003-09-30 11:40 AM


Heart talk, a rare and beautiful thing though it can be a hard thing too. I hope you fared well with it. Either way, don't give up hope, that yellow weather wins out every time if you wait for the clouds to fade.



~~J

passing shadows
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3 posted 2003-09-30 12:26 PM


always in my head...
alisa
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4 posted 2003-09-30 12:33 PM


you are amazing....
Edder
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5 posted 2003-09-30 12:35 PM


you write this so well...may your "yellow" always be sunshine
Kaoru
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6 posted 2003-09-30 12:56 PM


You put me in awe...
bslicker
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7 posted 2003-09-30 01:31 PM


good write

bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

Aenimal
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8 posted 2003-09-30 04:06 PM


sighs
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9 posted 2003-09-30 04:14 PM


grey is good. though yellow is better. you ache in this one...

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

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10 posted 2003-09-30 05:44 PM


loved this much
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