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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-09-30 09:23 AM

September 30, 2003

On days there is no wind
The rain falls straight from clouds
No slant to the flood of drops
Just free fall from above
That splatters with muted pound
And spreads to puddles

The grey portends coming months
When such offerings from heaven
May spell a treacherous slick
And I am left pondering,
As windshield wipers
Slap rhythmic time
In efforts to swipe away
The road spray from a line
Of commuters heading as I am
To another day,
How easily we might lose control
And spin or tumble into some
Ravine or field
Lifeless or maimed

Love was like that for me
All too often an out of control crash
That skidded to a stop
Someplace along a deserted stretch
Of time as the seasons of one heart
Or the other
Began to change

I’ve gotten good it seems,
At pulling dents from a battered soul
And painting over the scratches
Left behind from such times
But each time insuring again
That such will not wreck the
Patched work I am
Only to be surprised
When I find the road too slick
Or too narrow to avoid.

Today
The drive in was slow
Giving me too much time
To remember rainy days
Spent in a hay filled loft
Wrapped in you
and the road again,
became treacherous.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2003-09-30 09:26 AM

Love was like that for me
All too often an out of control crash
That skidded to a stop
Someplace along a deserted stretch
Of time as the seasons of one heart
Or the other
Began to change

I’ve gotten good it seems,
At pulling dents from a battered soul
And painting over the scratches
Left behind from such times
But each time insuring again
That such will not wreck the
Patched work I am
Only to be surprised
When I find the road too slick
Or too narrow to avoid.

~can't help but wondering if you have seen a few glimpses inside of my very own soul.....
fantastic writing Ron,
just plain damn fantastic....

It's better than I could have planned..
it's made me who I am...
{Trace Adkins}

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (09-30-2003 09:27 AM).]

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2003-09-30 09:29 AM

Once again,
you've made me smile...
can you see it
through the rain?

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-09-30 09:30 AM

"Today
The drive in was slow
Giving me too much time
To remember rainy days
Spent in a hay filled loft
Wrapped in you
and the road again,
became treacherous."

You know Ron...
there is nothing quite like,
waking up to a read from you
and a hot cup of tea....
I think it must feel
like a little piece of heaven..
I sure hope so!

~Soft smiles & Morning hugs, Nancy~

~ I love your glances meeting mine
across forever or the room ~

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2003-09-30 09:34 AM

Cpat Hair
C'est la vive enjoyed.

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

5 posted 2003-09-30 12:59 PM

Wonderful..
Amazing...

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2003-09-30 01:58 PM

I’ve gotten good it seems,
At pulling dents from a battered soul
And painting over the scratches
Left behind from such times
But each time insuring again
That such will not wreck the
Patched work I am
Only to be surprised
When I find the road too slick
Or too narrow to avoid.

Those highway crews fail miserably when it comes to marking approaching danger, right? *S*

Excellent write... I like this very much!

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

7 posted 2003-09-30 03:58 PM

brilliant

arthur
Senior Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 678
england

8 posted 2003-09-30 04:15 PM

love: the truimph of hope over experiance ( with apologise to the great Oscar)
arthur

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2003-09-30 08:01 PM

Nice writing...James

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

10 posted 2003-09-30 08:22 PM

Love,
SharaRose ~

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

11 posted 2003-09-30 08:46 PM

Ron...I know it could be dangerous, but would you mind sending some of that rain this way? Again you capture emotion through nature's imagery. Well done!

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

12 posted 2003-09-30 08:47 PM

oops...sorry...my computer burped!

[This message has been edited by Martie (09-30-2003 08:48 PM).]

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

13 posted 2003-09-30 09:34 PM

Haunting isn't it?

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

14 posted 2003-09-30 10:10 PM

quote:
I’ve gotten good it seems,
At pulling dents from a battered soul
And painting over the scratches
Left behind from such times
But each time insuring again
That such will not wreck the
Patched work I am
Only to be surprised
When I find the road too slick
Or too narrow to avoid.

those skid marks get harder to cover up as time goes by

but they are proof that you lived, and were not just a passerby on this road of life

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

15 posted 2003-10-01 02:21 AM

(big hugggssssssss) Oh Ron, tis is wonderful, sweet friend, I would really be thankful if you sent some of that rain here, the deserts of Colorado need it! (sigh) If you can see through the rain, you can make it through, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!