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James McInerney
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0 posted 2003-09-29 05:14 PM


“While I sleep”

Take me in your arms and hold me while I sleep,
Your fingers interlocked in mine like the perfect
dream,
The softness of your skin up close,
The words you speak, so sweet,
You probably didn’t realise this,
You made me feel complete.

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1 posted 2003-09-29 05:16 PM


How about "She Completes Me" as a title?  Oh my this reminded me of Gerry McGuire, and her saying, "You had me at hello!"  I sure hope you give this to the person you wrote it for, there is nothing more special than knowing you help someone to grow.  Again, so few words have said so much.  I loved it, can you tell?

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SharaRose
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2 posted 2003-09-29 05:52 PM


Awww the words "I bet you didn't know this" came to mind after reading this. Lovely words these words were to read. Thank you for sharing. A for you, and your love.
Love,
Shara~

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

[This message has been edited by SharaRose (09-29-2003 05:54 PM).]

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