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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-09-28 06:56 PM

Crowd Of One

your audience
daily waits
for you
hanging on
each impressive
silky word
I too
have been
part of
that crowd
but I
was pushed
out of
my place
in line
stop writing
about me
I was
your salt
but now
it only
flavors my
burning wounds
and you…

are breaking
my heart

"wish your room had room for two" John Mayer

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2003-09-28 07:07 PM

OneSlick~
You bleed the page sooooo beautifully~
Love you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
noles1@totcon.com

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

2 posted 2003-09-28 07:09 PM

ack. this hurts.

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

3 posted 2003-09-28 07:14 PM

throw cabbages at him, instead of roses.

ugh,

hugssssssssss

we know the same man

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

4 posted 2003-09-28 07:20 PM

These painful feeling are well and clearly stated.

Is it possible that this person thinks more of you than you know?

alisa
Member

since 2003-08-20

Posts 70
Florida

5 posted 2003-09-28 08:51 PM

wow, your poems always tell a story. you are amazing...

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

6 posted 2003-09-28 09:03 PM

That's so painful -- and a pain I have known, though only for a short while. I hope there's a resolution, and one that eases you.

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______________Ratleader______________

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

7 posted 2003-09-28 11:30 PM

So beautiful, and yet so sad..

I'm such a fan of your writing, lady.

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

8 posted 2003-09-29 12:19 PM

One is the lonliest number ...
  especially in a crowd!

      With each breaking wave
       you will find that you are never alone.

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

9 posted 2003-09-29 12:59 PM

Mmmm...I can almost feel the salt burning...I really enjoy your descriptive flair, my friend, and always a pleasure to read you...~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~S~

Foxyoasis
Senior Member

since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

10 posted 2003-09-29 01:06 AM

I can feel the pain. Great poem

James_A_Fraser
Senior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

11 posted 2003-09-29 01:09 AM

I'm glad we had this talk....I'll write one for you immediately.

...sorry, I tried but I simply could not resist!

~~J

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

12 posted 2003-09-30 12:53 PM

I too
have been
part of
that crowd
but I
was pushed
out of
my place
in line

I was feeling very empathetic... then James' response left me smiling. *S*

Excellent work!

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

13 posted 2003-10-04 02:53 PM

I read this the other day but didn't have time then to respond. Went looking for it today. An effective, strong (even in it's vulnerability) ending always impresses me and this poem, the way it read all the way through and then ended with perfection, has stuck with me for days. I could hear it. And then the pause, before those last two lines. And then...those lines. Really, really liked this Helen. Excellent write!

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