Meghan’s Song [Kaoru’s Challenge]

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Sunshine

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0 posted 2003-09-28 06:42 PM

Meghan’s Song [Kaoru’s Challenge]

“She is too demanding”
as reasoning flies out windows
while age lines the music of this soul
around my eyes, to pick, “just one” song
that makes me feel…

“how righteous” it sounds in my mind
to go way back and stump those that weren’t
even a twinkle yet, as
boys on the beach still play in the sand
and diamonds would lay around
my throat,
if I could pick, just one

but it’s a newer older version of me
that hears the question held tight
when a man really, really longs to
love a woman, when a certain guitar starts,

and I listen…

as he touches her so well, that
he watches his unborn children
dance in her eyes
when a voice of a man can hold me
in that spell
so well

that is when I feel the young poets,
men, and women alike
reaching with their words,
no want for selling their soul

just stretching to touch that moment
to block a throat
skip a heart
my fingers reaching to turn the radio up
to feel those words…

to really know the poet’s thoughts
and see the unborn poems dance down their pen.

~*~

*HAVE YOU EVER REALLY LOVED A WOMAN
- Bryan Adams, Film: Don Juan DeMarco http://www.ugcs.caltech.edu/~harel/cgi/page/htmlit?Loved_A_Woman.html

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (09-28-2003 08:43 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-09-28 06:46 PM

Wonderful write Karilea!
Now I must head off and find that challenge!!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ I love your glances meeting mine
across forever or the room ~

Bill Charles
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2 posted 2003-09-28 06:52 PM

Sunshine - this is a most amazing write. You pen your words well...

BC

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3 posted 2003-09-28 06:58 PM

this is very beautiful

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
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Martie

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4 posted 2003-09-28 07:35 PM

Karilea

"as he touches her so well, that
he watches his unborn children
dance in her eyes"

That above is a remarkably beautiful statement and to be touched like that, incredible! Loved this, sis!!

dingusjr
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5 posted 2003-09-28 08:36 PM

WOW....sees his unborn child dance in her eyes......took my breath away.
again, some images in their I wish I had written. Congratulations!
Larry

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6 posted 2003-09-28 09:04 PM

beautifully penned,,,

MorninGlory
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7 posted 2003-09-28 09:39 PM

Sunshine, this was beautifully written, I love that song by Bryan Adams, I'm a sap for a beautiful love song for sure. Your write fits right there in the folds of the song..

~ becky

garysgirl

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8 posted 2003-09-28 10:18 PM

Oh, Karilea!! I love to hear Bryan Adams sing,
and I love that song, too. I need to look for that
challenge. I love music.......Rod Stewart,
Enya, 'NSYNC,
Diamond Rio.....are just a few.

And, I love the way you put this song into your poem.

Hugs

Ethel

Kaoru

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9 posted 2003-09-28 11:04 PM

This is so ...what I was hoping for.

Very well done, m'lady. *tips hat*

littlewing
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10 posted 2003-09-28 11:37 PM

Karilea:

beautiful writing and challeneg well met

just stretching to touch that moment
to block a throat
skip a heart
my fingers reaching to turn the radio up
to feel those words…

I shall now go listen . . .
xxoo

Mistletoe Angel

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11 posted 2003-09-29 12:35 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Karilea, I too admire Bryan Adam's songwriting, dearest friend, he truly has a great voice that sets the mood and tone for the deep emotions and heart in his lyrics! (smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is a wonderful response, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Sunnyone
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12 posted 2003-09-29 01:09 AM

The music plays on through your words, and I'm feeling it as I read this....and loving it too...~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~S~

Dark Angel
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13 posted 2003-09-29 02:59 AM

I fell in love with him when I first heard, "The summer of 69" and kept falling after that. It's been so long since I've listened to him but this Sunshinygirl made me fall in love with him all over again.

A challenge met and penned beautifully.

keeping it.

M

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

Sunshine

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14 posted 2003-10-27 02:58 PM

Thanks for looking at this one. Meghan issued a wonderful challenge, and this is a song that has haunted me ever since the first time I heard it. It was a challenge in and of itself to do justice to the song, which stands alone.

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