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Martie
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0 posted 2003-09-28 01:49 PM



The Strapping of the Wench

In hiding place I found my muse
made of pewter air
breathed her in like cool and dark
a chocolate from the Frigidaire

My muse WAS there but she’s not fair
now she’s stuck in scenery of heart
between the tender nape of neck
and the garden afraid to start

She is part of the transformation
in movement out the door
the sound she makes cries free me
and then hold me evermore

Twirl she says in softest voice
to me with a evil wink
then lifts her pretty skirt off floor
and dances in my ink

I brush her off my shoulder
in her next whim then I find
she is flapping arms and darting tongue
in rhythm from behind

I’m tired of chasing after her
can’t she see I need a break
my words are screaming in my head
and what comes out now just seems fake

She jokes a lot when I am down
thinking she’ll get me laughing
but if I could catch that wicked wench
she would get a real good strapping

© Copyright 2003 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-09-28 01:55 PM


Martie,  it must have worked!

Cause this is superbly done and I could
see that little devilette sitting there
sticking her tongue out...  I recently
quoted myself as saying that female muses
were the worst ones....

Mayhaps I was right?

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2 posted 2003-09-28 01:56 PM


Makes you want to wonder what's next
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3 posted 2003-09-28 01:56 PM


Sweet! Ain't self-knowledge a wonderful thing?

You are funny lady, and I -- well, I think that's grand!


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4 posted 2003-09-28 01:59 PM


Sweet! Ain't self-knowledge a wonderful thing?

And ain't it odd that I go back to see what I wrote and see that it wrote part of itself twice --- Well, repetition adds emphasis, like I said somewhere else....


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5 posted 2003-09-28 02:10 PM


I wish my muse would dog my tail.  very nicely written.  

Peace, Joe
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seeking the serendipitous magical mysteries of life's ubiquitous twisteries

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6 posted 2003-09-28 02:15 PM



Winsome little lassie, she
who hangs your words in fantasy
but the chocolate odor of the air
sat her down in easy chair
and pulled from blue a little feat
oh, chocolate's a little treat!


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7 posted 2003-09-28 02:15 PM


Gotta love her though!!!

Martie, Martie~ your writing is a sweet treat.  

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8 posted 2003-09-28 02:17 PM


grins..excellent martie
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9 posted 2003-09-28 03:20 PM


Suggestion: instead of that strapping, try just hugging her for a good long while. That seems to work for me.



~~J

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10 posted 2003-09-28 04:14 PM




(giggles in delight) Now now now, spanking and punishment isn't the way to calming this wench, it is all in sensitivity and comfort! (giggles) I just love this, sweet friend, God Bless You, sweet friend, your poetry is always so colorful and playful, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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11 posted 2003-09-28 04:48 PM


Martie send her over please... Via Air Mail lol if possible. She can sit on my shoulder anytime Tell her it's a vacation.

it'll give YOU a break

Love it Martie

Maree.

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12 posted 2003-09-28 06:22 PM


ROFL... That's ONE way to get a muse to do your bidding! *G* Enjoyed! *S*
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13 posted 2003-09-28 06:32 PM


Martie - a'hhhh, the muse, loves to play games at times...

BC

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14 posted 2003-09-28 07:00 PM


Nietzsche wrote in Thus Spake Zarathustra a scene wherein the Witch was counseling Zarathustra on dealing with women. He wrote:

"The Witch said, "Zarathustra, when you go to woman, bring your whip."

I always wondered if old Nietzsche (confused as he seemed to be) was really talking about a poetic Muse.



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15 posted 2003-09-29 12:09 PM


Hey!

Nice picture!!!

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16 posted 2003-09-29 12:15 PM


I loved this!!

And the new pic!

Susan

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17 posted 2003-09-29 12:41 PM


Now that dear lady is a real "Lilac Moment" which I will just tuck away for a rainy day to enjoy again and again.
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18 posted 2003-09-29 02:12 AM





Martie, you know your inner voice simply
won’t be ignored.
Strapping or not... lol

This one of yours was a lot of fun!
And Martie, your new picture is absolutely charming!

Richy


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19 posted 2003-09-29 07:52 AM


I thought for sure I'd replied to this one.

*chuckling*

I'm beginning to wonder about you, lady...are you sure you are not Cpat's muse? I understand she is fond of leather and such as well...


Thanks for the smile this morning.

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20 posted 2003-09-29 09:00 AM


Martie... to see the laugh in this one, tells me..
well done and I understand your muse far better than I should..lol..

Ser... you got my muse all wrong... she isn't into leather or pain... and Martie has too much class to be my muse. She is a lady after all...


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21 posted 2003-09-29 09:12 AM


MartieMartie~
In the frivolity of it all ... this thought is TOO PRECIOUS~

'Twirl she says in softest voice
to me with a evil wink
then lifts her pretty skirt off floor
and dances in my ink'


Twirl girl ... twirl~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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22 posted 2003-09-29 09:13 AM


Yes, Ron, of course she is a lady, and one who has my total respect. I didn't mean to offend or imply otherwise.

sigh.

Anybody know the way to 27A Wimpole St.?


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23 posted 2003-09-29 09:32 AM


ahaha Martie - I adore this . . .
(mine once tried to bring me up
on charges! The nerve . . .)
*smile*

between the tender nape of neck
and the garden afraid to start

beautiful lines
xxoo


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24 posted 2003-09-29 06:36 PM


wonderful wonderful *clapping* just love this
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25 posted 2003-09-29 07:31 PM


I'm glad your muse let you meander over into the realm of rhyme, enjoyed muchly.
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26 posted 2003-09-29 07:35 PM


Martie - what a fun poem with so much powerful truth to it about writing - Paul
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27 posted 2003-09-29 10:22 PM


Now if a man had written that he would be in trouble!
Dark Angel
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28 posted 2006-01-01 05:16 PM


I loved this then and I love it still.....

smiling wide....



m xx

how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more
~Neruda~

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