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gemjop
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0 posted 2003-09-28 11:07 AM




My voice has no feminine waver
as I sing
count the tremble
of goosebump skin

There are no perfect voices in this head
just ones that make so much sense

I made it easy for you to be near me
despite how far we were

I sang loudest
out of all the late birds

Could never match this normal mans legendary melodies made
you could never have written one
to convey the warmth of love as he
the way you said you wished you could
for me

I will, would have
at least

Wait a lonely lifetime.


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Duncan
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1 posted 2003-09-28 11:55 AM


"I will, would have
at least

Wait a lonely lifetime."

Like what ya did with this gem.  Reminds me of another transplanted Brit...


[This message has been edited by Duncan (09-28-2003 11:56 AM).]

Susan Caldwell
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2 posted 2003-09-28 12:21 PM


"Wait a lonely lifetime."


Gemma, baby...that is my biggest fear.

Thank you for reminding me that is NOT what I want..

Susan

Wind
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3 posted 2003-09-28 12:26 PM


hhhmmmm. giggles insanely.

yes..we hear the music in our eyes instead of our ears................................................................................................................................................................................

are you feeling abusive today?

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

Duncan
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4 posted 2003-09-28 12:48 PM


Uhoh.....the brat's back.  
gemjop
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5 posted 2003-09-28 12:53 PM


today i am feeling half and half. i'm trying to blow dry my hair and type at the same time. where have u been by the way? busy with school? writesomething!!!!
Wind
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6 posted 2003-09-28 01:17 PM


ok porch puppies...

something.

there I wrote it and I have school. most people my age do..unless they drop out. What about you gem? coughs
don't you have school today?

and dunc...where is the poem you promised me. did I miss it?

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

Aenimal
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7 posted 2003-09-28 02:26 PM


i need to here the white now...i adore that album
n2dmystic
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8 posted 2003-09-28 02:38 PM


sometimes singing solo is much better than a dead duet.  good write

Peace, Joe
in the big MT
seeking the serendipitous magical mysteries of life's ubiquitous twisteries

Mistletoe Angel
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9 posted 2003-09-28 03:06 PM






(big hugggsssssss) No contest...the Beatles are the Father of all great rock and roll, period. (kiss on cheek) You speak with the true heart of their lyrics, sweet friend, fear not, for it will not be a lonely lifetime when you find true love smiling around the corner, ooohhhh...here comes the sun now! God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Gemma, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Kaoru
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10 posted 2003-09-28 11:06 PM


Gem..you're damn good, you know that?


Enchantress
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11 posted 2003-09-28 11:15 PM


Excellent write Gem..
Much enjoyed..and love your style.
~Hugs~


~ I love your glances meeting mine
     across forever or the room ~

garysgirl
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12 posted 2003-09-28 11:30 PM


Gemma, I love the Beatles...
and have since I heard them
the first time. I love your
poem, too.
Hugs  
Ethel Mae

littlewing
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13 posted 2003-09-28 11:33 PM


gem:

blackbird singing in the dead of night . . .
take these broken wings and learn to fly . . .

Beautiful writing and challenge well met
and tribute much deserved
xxoo

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14 posted 2003-09-29 12:03 PM


Gemma- The beatles?? I knew I liked you for some reason!!
lol
seriously, this is an awesome write, and it definately answers the challenge.

We are all equal but we’re individually different
and able to reach the impossible if we try.

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