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greco
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0 posted 2003-09-27 11:43 PM




Here begins a trip with a man named Chip
The man small, drove a car with such a flip
This man with a hummer, had a big fear
The fear when he has not won, he would tear
From Saint Joe’s to Vegas, the world goes round
Lot to the street, the freedom a great sound
Exit from exit, climate a changing
Feeling his life needed some arranging
Feeling so big the man yet was still small
Not accepted, he sought a certain call
A call was answered with all the bright lights
His eyes were opened to many new sights
Realizing that his life was not so bad
Looking at the people he felt so sad
Hitting him hard in the face and the heart
Seeing that even the bums don’t have carts
He knew he was better off than before
Not feeling that he had to feel so sore
His life, seeking for life had no more tears
Living life to the fullest, no more fears

thanks i had ti write a poem for lit and we had to do it chaucer style so anything would be great thanks

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greco
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1 posted 2003-09-27 11:45 PM


hey soryy i should put some info in this St. Joes in the high school i go to and we had to pick a place to go from our parking lot so that right there should be enough
thanks again

charm
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2 posted 2003-09-28 12:14 PM


Good
icebox
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3 posted 2003-09-28 12:32 PM


English today is not the same language in which Chaucer wrote, so it is difficult to make a direct comparison.  Perhaps you should look at the reasons behind the structure of his work.  That way you might approach your assignment with a more simple view.

Chaucer wrote to entertain and to convey local stories, the common tales he absorbed in his travels (and in his life, he traveled quite a bit).  He started his adult life as a page and apprentice scribe in the entourage of the Black Prince; accuracy in that work was critical.  He was moderately educated and knew his work would be read by a small population of people who could read, so he stayed close to the facts of daily life, but he used rhyme and meter to assist the mostly illiterate population, the majority, to remember what he wrote.  You seem to have missed that part of the motivations which shaped his style. This poem of your's would be difficult to commit to memory.  

Chaucer wrote with the intent that his writings would be easily memorized by people who heard the work being read (because they could not read it themselves).

Old English, (and even the later translations in Middle English) besides not sounding much at all like Modern English, was both formal and profane at the same time and the common style of speech often included rhyme, homilies, parables, common metaphors, etc., to maintain the acceptance of ideas among strangers.  

What sounds to us, today, like very stilted and artificially contrived rhyming verse, was in fact very close to the plain English of his day.  Try to re-cast your ideas that way and you will be closer to Chaucer's style than you now are.

This was a difficult assignment.  I hope you had the opportunity to learn the tools needed to do the task well.

I'll tell you a small story about Chaucer.  When he was young and in Europe with the Black Prince, he was captured by the enemy.  As was the custom of the day, he was put up for ransom.  It was a difficult decision, but the ransom eventually was paid.  The ransom price, for the boy who became arguably the most famous English writer of his era, was the price of a horse.  Not even a grand riding horse or a noble battle charger, but a draft horse; perhaps comparable today to the value of something like a beat up used bicycle.

Try to see learning as the adventure it can be.


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4 posted 2003-09-28 04:51 AM




(big hugggsssssss) Icebox is right on the money, dearest friend, this is a wonderful debut and I would also follow his advice and biographical information he has provided if you wish to edit your piece before the assignment is due, and you can also submit your poetry in Critical Analysis if you would like some deeper feedback and constructive criticism! You have a wonderful effort here though, conveying such deep thoughts in the manner like Chaucer himself did, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet Greco, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your wonderful poetry, sweet friend, we all love you so much, and be sure to check your E-mail for a very special greeting from all of us here at Passions just for you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Greco, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (09-28-2003 04:56 AM).]

greco
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5 posted 2003-09-28 07:42 AM


ok ya thanks i will tkae this into consideration thank you very much for this this has haelped a lot i will look at it and see more of what my teacher wants to do. Along the lines of how chaucer did it or if he just wants us to make a poem in AA BB style about a person traveling.
But again thank you very much this has helped and will help in the future

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