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The Key |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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The Key I found the door to wonderland The key a flower in my hand Aroma bathed me in its bath And sunlight lit a rainbow path. This world was filled with birds and bees Lovely trees with bright green leaves Folds of gold dissolved the night With colored hews of magic light. My eyes filled up with tears of dew This loveliness of dreamers view It made me bow my head in prayer The beauty of this world I stare And then I cried in dark abide I knew this view was just outside But tarnished with a film of need Covered with an acids greed We all dream dreams of heavens best We’ve turned away what heaven blessed. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'm always smiling when you leave internal rhymes... What a way to start my day!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine And with your sunshine, what a way to start my day. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Ah, Seymour, wise words this Saturday morn. We do take the wonders just outside our door for granted. Well done! Enchantress is visiting me this fine day, so we have the English Breakfast tea and toast with orange marmalade already! hugs from both of us, Chris & NancyLee  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Chris & Nancy, How nice to have three for tea. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful and lyrical...nicely done! Eric |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ There is such a consistency of lilting beauty to your pennings~ Again ... this one is savored~ The rhyme encapsulated within the rhyme is such a joy to read~ *Huglets* dear poet~  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
We all dream dreams of heavens best We’ve turned away what heaven blessed. Seymour, I know that I've said it many, many times this past year, but i love your poetry, and your beautiful rhymes you gift us with every day. Each one of them is a gem to be treasured. Thanks for being you, my friend!!  Hugs to you   Ethel |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This flows so nicely Sy The ending really drives it home well. Good writing my friend, excellent rhyme scheme and meter. Cool to the bone! Eric The best teachers have the biggest ears |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The key a flower in my hand =================== For you...a bouquet of keys..  and a bouquet of *winkies* too.   "If you feel heartbreak, distant thunder, lightning, earthquakes ... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Eric Thank you Eric. Marge, Huglets bach my sweet. Ethel, And I thank you for being you. ethome You are a good friend. JM, I miss you. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
A most insightful write, Sy...your last two lines makes us stop and think...well done as always.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Nice to meet you Seymour and enjoy your rhymes....some wonderful images, too. THANKS. Larry. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yes Sy, sometimes we don't have enough to say about this awesome world we have been given... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Oh Seymour, it is so very sad but true, the heavens are too grand and we can make purgatory just as heavenly as possible but many are choosing to make it borderline to hell! (sad sigh) I pray for all our children, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
scorpio Thank you my friend. Thank you Larry for the read and comment. Barry, Agree with you on that. Noah, A delight to see and read your reply. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
It is sad how we've let the earth go and how human greed has taken over our souls. Well said. Corinne |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne Thank you dear for the read and comment. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
My eyes filled up with tears of dew This loveliness of dreamers view It made me bow my head in prayer The beauty of this world I stare It's frightening to think we may have lost the key already to go back and repair all we humans have destroyed. Though it is easy to find beauty in most things on this earth, so much is beyond repair. Definately a thought provoking write here sey. into my library. ~I wanna live, I wanna give, I've been a miner for a heart of gold~ Neil Young |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
gemjop You are a pleasure to write to and for. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
sy, this poem will stay with me for a long time to come! Your words could not have been more true or wise. We are often looking beyond the beauty we already have at our fingertips. We are often hoping for the grass to be greener on the other side, all the while missing the magic we already got! this was wonderful. take care. amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Aimster, Thank you for a wonderful reply. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This touches me deeply, my friend... you've penned these words of wisdom with beauty. *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern And your reply has touched me. |
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